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[On Hold] Star Wars: One with the Force

A long time ago in a galaxy far, far away.... One man had a story some would call tragic, while others envied him for being called a Hero. He was someone who always had a knack for strategy and tactics, being first a Jedi, then being corrupted into a Sith Master, due to a couple of complications and 300 years of torture, it all came to an end with both opposite aspects coming together with him being One with the Force, but he couldn't just let go, so he took a decision in his last moments that would forever change his life and history. Please share with me a lot of constructive criticism, I would be very happy to improve my writing style and story with your feedback. I have a very demanding job on weekdays, this novel is currently on hold since I'm studying the lore and creating the big picture, as soon as I have a better understanding, I'll publish more chapters. Disclaimer: I do not own any of the characters of the Star Wars universe.

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Chapter 1 – A birth that shouldn’t happen

In the year 41 BBY, Inside of a house, you could see desert dust all over the floor with wall in a beige color with a rough exterior seemly built out of a similar mixture of mud and cement, nearby a couple of tools with grease on them that vibrated due to a desert Storm that was happening, but what really deserves attention is the sound of a desolate high-pitched cry.

One that in another parallel dimension didn't happen.

Inside of a room that was as clean as you could get considering the situation, you could see a mother giving birth, whilst sweating and crying in pain that would for sure awaken everyone nearby, had she lived inside a settlement.

Next to her was a man holding her hand and saying:

"It's almost there, Darling, keep pushing!"

"I'm trying! Do you want to do this in my place?!"

"Come on, Kish, don't yell at your husband, he's only trying to help" said a woman with a blue color of skin and what seemed two tails coming out of her head, that was between her suspended legs with clean clothes and a mask on her face.

"ARGHHH…"

With one last painful push, a baby boy was born crying loudly at the pain that inflating his lungs for the first time.

The woman in medical clothes seemed to take a hit by the scream as her face paled, but she quickly recuperated herself, she moved to clean the boy in a nearby basin of clean water, while checking to see if everything was okay with him while looking with an uncertainty.

"You did it, baby, I'm proud of you!" Smiled the husband sweetly at his wife, both oblivious to the whole affair.

Kish, still exhausted from the birth, smiled as well asking:

"Where is he, Laura…?"

Laura, just finishing putting the boy in a blanket, brought him to their parents and said:

"He is a fine young boy, and very healthy at that, he has your chin, Ossun"

Ossun picked the boy from Laura, and stood there for a moment, with tears on his eyes, before showing him to his wife.

"Look baby, this is our baby boy"

Laura saw the baby, and, at the same moment, he opened his eyes showcasing an amazing display of Heterochromia, with one eye having a clear crystal blue color and the other a dark crimson red, surprising the mother.

"… Wow look at this, Ossun, he's beautiful, and his eyes are simply mesmerizing, it's nothing like ours" said the mother looking the mirror nearby, seeing a disheveled bob cut brown hair with light brown eyes and what used to be a fair skin now toned bronze by the incessant sun.

Ossun went to Kish while Laura, went to the common room shouting something, he faintly heard

"Lilith, Ray, you can come now…"

Ossun exclaimed in surprised seeing the eyes of his son.

"He's beautiful, I'm sure he'll be quite a lady killer in the future, so, what will we name him?"

Nearby you could see Laura with whispering something to a 1,95-meter (6,4 ft) man with a full beard, grizzly hair and a mean look on his face.

"I told you…! …small force scream… fortunately…"

Besides them was a small girl which appeared to be 3 years old with golden hair in a ponytail looking curiously inside the room with a gleam in her eyes.

Kish, still mesmerized by her son, said almost immediately:

"He'll be someone amazing, I just know, with time he'll be one of the wisest! just like it's with Krayt Dragon… so, what about Drake?"

Ossun with his eyes wide opened said:

"That's a lot of expectations to put on the little guy… Drake Filini'el, I like it! Our little Krayt Dragon!"

Kish laughed out loud, then smiled lovingly to her son:

"My son… I still can't believe I'm a mother… Laura, Ray, Lili, come see our little miracle"

Laura came with her husband while the daughter run almost falling with excitement:

"Hey Drake! You're going to be my little brother from now on, so I'll take care of you"

Lilith said with a gleam of excitement and mischievousness.

Raysin gave her a light slap on the back of the head saying:

"No pranking the kid".

"Aww… that's no fun".

Laura, Kish and Ossun smiled lovingly and the scene, before turning to the boy who, inside the blanket turned to the newcomers, watched them with curiosity before crying loudly again.

Hey guys! This is my first book, I hope you guys enjoy it. I love the Star Wars lore and have a couple of ideas of how to go with this story, but if any of you guys have interesting ideas, please let me know in the comment section.

Grammar mistakes and the like please insert as comments in the paragraph so that I can fix it.

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