editing first draft novel

This is a cute novel that appeals to a young audience, and that appears to have been written by a young aspiring writer. There remains to be much need for editing and proofing, and the story reads like a first-draft, or even, at times, a stream-of-consciousness piece, but the plot is engaging and there are many characters to enjoy.

I really like the novel, but tbh, it feels more like a rough draft than a novel. It very badly needs editing on some chapters and is a bit too fast-paced, IMO, but overall, it's a good novel.

Dropped this fanfic after about one minute. The grammar is beyond terrible. I would seriously recommend the author to spend some time going back and editing his/her work, as it seems his/her story hasn't developed past a rough first draft.

The Author starts out his first book Mortal rather well as it builds up the world and the main character very well. In this second novel the writing quality takes a downturn as well as the editing very heavily. He uses the same phrase over and over in many situations and all in all it gets rather frustrating to read. The story also completely leaves everything that happens in the first novel and changes to all new people and situations also the Asans personality feels like it changes to much. My assessment is throw it back to the editing and rough draft stage and rethink the overall direction the story is going. Other than that it is a very good novel if you can change the sentences and phrases in your head as you read.

it seems the author is too busy to check comments and repeats his mistakes, he keeps making the name change to heero, or his rough draft has heero as the name and is not editing it fully