if you fix the pronouns(can't even say this without remembering what the delusional ppl say)..............anyway if you stop using he/him when it's a girl or her/she when it's a guy this would get a 5 star review although you don't do it a lot but it happens during the important times where i sometimes get confused Overall it's good.......haven't played the game but i have watched th gameplay so give the ppl some justice

Looks like I will stop reading this since you nerf MC system for no reason. Before that book was great. Long chapters, grammar was ok, the story was slow but intriguing.

Keep writing, its really cool to read, the protagonist is good and for now the relationships are really cool and the characters have personalities that make the work dynamic

Damn, I came looking for copper and found gold, damn good series, keep it up champ, I hope for more episodes

Disappointed, he restarted the book with a boring story and the protagonist is just an ordinary soldier. Instead of something innovative, it didn't need to be a system but something different. Sad about this, I even liked the narrative even if it had some problems, now it's just another ordinary narrative.

Regardless of whether the fanfic is good or bad I decide to give this story 5 stars, finally someone made a TLOU fanfic, my favorite game series.

It’s alright I kinda liked the old story more this new one is alright too but you know I really came for the system and there ain’t no system anymore so it’s like WTF am I here for. Like there isn’t even a shitty system like damn brah if I wanted to read about a regular mf in the last of us world I would just go play the game.

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Gostei da novela espero que continue , agora me explica por que diabos é nescessário 140 caracteres para uma avaliação ? Não é como se eu fosse fazer uma analise profunda de 8 capítulos.

Nice work! Your writing is very good, though there's the occasional mix up of pronouns. Other than that I'd say its great. I hope you keep it up.