Is It Wrong to Try to Pick Up Girls in a Dungeon? ❌ Is It Wrong to Try to Review My Own Work With Five Stars? ✅

Bruh that synopsis is a hot mess. I think your premise has potential, but you gotta work on your flow and word choice. Try reading out loud what you write

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Author blue balled us if you dare to blue ball now I will curse you that you will never pop your cherry if you didn't or or.... or yes you will always be blue balled hmph .👿👿👿

The story is pretty decent, I see a lot of people hating on it for the MC becoming a devil through evil pieces. I assume since he used a prototype piece there's no slave feature yet, just turning into a devil. I made that assumption using one of the author notes, the author addressed all the hate this Fic is getting and said something about not becoming a slave, I don't necessarily remember what he exactly said.

This is just to inform future possible readers that the 1 star reviews you see on this novel are essentially just slander. They likely don't like some plot detail or something the author said so have decided to review bomb. People were unfairly review bombing this novel so simply I thought I'd give an actual review to actually help. First of all people are saying that the synopsis & title don't make sense... That is a rather stupid judgement as there haven't even been twenty chapters however he is planning to make a Mystic Arts faction while the synopsis has already been met. Due to the lack of chapters I didn't want to write a review as there isn't much to mention. What there is I like as the pacing is good with the characters being grabbing enough for me to sit down & read in one sitting. He is in the new world after getting backstabbed by his master by chapter 2... What doesn't make sense about that? The story is also something you can follow along with, even if it isn't your cup of tea, so hardly one star worthy. The updates appear to drop every couple days while the writing quality is such that I do not remember any mistakes nor has anyone commented on it in the reviews. As such I'll give it a pass. Either way it was clearly readable so revealing that those who gave it a complete one star are simply false reviews. Character design... So far Serafall seems fine but not much to judge it however, once again, not worth a one star by far. World background is using DxD and nothing has been ouright butchered so that is fine. If people vote 1 star on that it makes you wonder why they even bothered reading a DxD novel in the first place.

Dude your writing is soo good. Will you please write something on TV fanfics like; The 100, The Vampire Diaries and its spinoffs, Teen Wolf, Game of thrones, etc. Will love to see your fanfics on those. I kinda not like marvel fanfics, cause, marvel has beings who can see the literal futures. And if there is an anomaly in the timeline, the TVA will handle it, so the sacred timeline doesn't branch. Some authors give reason that they see predictions not futures. But then what about TVA, watchers, one above all, cosmic beings, etc.

It’s honestly insulting how he lures with the title and description but fail to deliver this badly in the story…

I can't say much because it's only 8 chapters, but it's good so far.

Happy for a while cuz my fav anime(dxd) mixed in but sad cuz 2-3 girls in harem. what a letdown 😒, we all know how dxd story goes. can't believe i have to say this🤦 Issei is better than author