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This Fanfic is by far one of the best i've read in a long while, id say its almost as good as "The Wind Calamity" by Devil_Hex. I cant say i didn't had my doubts at the start, i hate fanfic's with concepts such as systems or anything related to it, after all, humans are not computers. However i bore with it and was astonished on how someone can write so well on their very first fanfic. The fanfic does not include a gaming system, thank god, however when the MC gets reincarnated he does get benefits that does not ruin the story but instead make it better, even tho i had my doubts. Writing quality is speak, better than 90% of other fanfics i've read so far, with only a few spelling mistakes here and their. Story development is absolutely peak and thats not even mentioning character development, its so astonishing on how the author discribes the characters feelings and emotions while exploring MC's thought process. However i would suggest making it clear when the characters are talking and thinking, and highlighting when a jutsu is casted ( not literary), Overall minor things. This Fanfic has a huge amount of potential and if honed can be distinguished among the rest, good luck.

I’m just reading this for fun, but I also have critiques if the author wants to be better as a writer. If you’re also writing this for fun then take this review with a grain of salt, but still read it(Hopefully this won’t make you emo teenager upset, I’m just trying to get your head on straight). 1. Mc gets 3 gacha rewards and goes to naruto world, and in the most cliche way-starts chakra training around the age of 2. How dumb is that, you literally could’ve had him start at 6 or 7, and then work your way to being op. There’s this fake drama the author wrote, to try and offset how moronic his characters decisions are to get strong so early, which leads to his shinobi parents becoming a bit suspicious about his training and obvious maturity and wisdom(Idc if mc has limitless improvement, still a hot dumpster take AT age 2). Getting strong from the VERY start when you’re born-is insanely cliche and overdone, it doesn’t reward anything and makes everything seem redundant. 2. Another mind palace bs ability, mc has also started on it age 2. Apparently has knowledge how to do it because plot, a lot of authors do this and it shows non-critical thinking and lack of intelligence on their part. 3. Grammar is good, story seems ok right now. I don’t mind op stories, but the fact that you’re just instantly getting to it instead of growing from weak to strong is abysmal. You gotta find a balance because you are the author, it’s your job to make a story entertaining without bs plot devices and drama for the sake of drama that adds nothing to character development or story progression. Also be realistic in some cases, like what made you think having your mc start chakra training at age 2 was a smart idea? In a shinobi world, everyone would find that suspicious and think of you as an anomaly or worse, ESPECIALLY the parents. Now you’ve written yourself in a corner and have to find a way to justify it, which could’ve been avoided if you just started at least 4 years later. Common sense goes a long way into these stories, don’t let anyone tell you different.

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This fic is a fresh breath of air apart from the usual fics WBNVL has (Chinese trash or one with bad grammar or with a ridiculous and cliched storyline) read till Chapter 10... the fic is amazing .... it's something unique, setting apart from the usual Senju or Uzumaki or uchiha or clanless orphan trope This fic's really tryna cover something else, Yamanaka. the characterization and thought process till now is great... mc is a genius and isn't hiding I hope that author-san will keep on updating and not abandon this Would recommend it 100 percent

Read till chapter 10. On par with The Wind Calamity so far, which is honestly the highest praise that can be given to a Naruto fanfic in my opinion.

Personality of protagonist feels inhumane and unnatural. the story's flow is slightly off as the MC seems to be narating instead of thinking or observing. Apart from this, the story is good and has potential.

Going really well so far, I just read Chap 7, and I'm impressed.I really hope it's not dropped

I'm really looking forward to read more and author thank you creating such a good Mc, I always liked Smart and hard working Mc not the Cliché Mc who asked God for a 'System' to become strong. Without Hard work you won't able to become strong. ..... ..... ..... ..... ..... ..... .....