Honestly this FanFic is pretty decent, it's well written and I haven't noticed any grammatical errors. my only issue is the fact that's it's stuck in the 3rd person, you never get to hear the MC's thought or anyone's for that matter, Which creates a disconnect with the story. Not to mention the fact that the author just boosted Overhaul with no explanation. althought I haven't seen mha in a while Overhaul's quirk is strong mainly because Overhaul has some of the best control in the series yet somehow the mc gains control that is beyond what overhaul is capable with barely any training. also the writing is dry... like REALLY dry I haven't felt a tinge of emotion coming from any of the characters that is just "he felt confusion" Not a bad read tho

This isn't Overhaul's power, it's an amped-up version on steroids and without the limitations that simply throws all the bets out and makes everything extremely boring and predictable. The character is ridiculously powerful, he can basically do the same thing as Suguru and Mahito, only easier, better and without the consequences, and that's just two aspect of his power. What he does should normally be possible only with the domain expansion technique.

story is bland, and there is not much emotion. needlessly buffed overhaul quirk. mc is mary sue every day chinese mc, no thoughts, head empty, strolling around the story. mc creates a chimera and how he did it explained afterward with no details, nothing but a patchwork for plot holes.

Bro its amazing...please dont drop this...I have a suggestion if you dont mind its just instead of 2 short chapters every day why dont you combine it to 1 chapter and release it....But yeah the story is kinda great...Please keep going

bro it's so good ,Writing and story are both amazing i hope you will keep writing

As I have seen in other comments, it is a waste of time to explain why the rating. The characters are bad, the plot is meh, the development is meh, the writing quality is average, as is the story.

Its... bad. Not even like in a few points of criticism way, its just all around low-quality, to the point that its grating to read. Bro flipflops his personality after 20 chapters and just starts hanging on his aunt's words like they are gospel despite him very much not having a personality even somewhat like that so far. That is the only 'Critique' worth actually mentioning. Everything else is so obvious a high-school student would be quoting their teacher. I decided to just drop it when the Author decided to make him go to Kyoto instead of Tokyo because "Auntie Told Me To."

I enjoy this fanfic quite a lot. The mc is relatable and mostly consistent. I also really enjoy the story and the abilities you've chosen for the character. Just some advice to improve the work, maybe up the word count by around 25% for each chapter, also include the POV's of each character more when the mc does something significant with another one, for example Gojo's POV when finding out about mc or Mechamaru upon seeing how strong he is. Don't do harem like other commentors ask. Finally, make sure you write the story in a way you enjoy to avoid burn out, and have fun!

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