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SpelloyalLv126mth
2024-10-19 15:32

Good idea, has a lot of potential, but so far it's a hard fic to read. The info dumps are endless, the author writes long texts detailing a lot of information that is practically useless, like a long summary of baki, bentou, etc. He could have easily cut these summaries down to two or three paragraphs, but instead he often writes long dissertations about all sorts of things. I'm on chapter 10 and so far we've had about 2/10 story and 8/10 of that is just info dumps.

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While the story had an interesting and fun concept with a good start, everything kinda just went downhill. Good Ideas but not really good execution. Structure of the story is a mess especially when chapters are just full of massive infodumps that really explains a lot too much. A simple summary is better and having such an infodump during situations just messes up the pacing and flow of the story. Yeah sure its their to explain things to people who are unfamiliar with the anime or manga but some of them are just completely unessecary. You don't need to tell the readers as if they want to learn more, they can just search for it themselves if they are fully interested in it. The true main issue that the story suffers is the MC. While yes it was fun having him takeover a side character, the MC's personality overall was just generic nice guy which kinda became boring and eyerolling. He even has some cluelessness which just was annoying. I expected him to have some personality but really he is no different than the generic harem nice guy which most of the girls like because he is nice. Its especially obvious with the whole situation with Kakinozaka as besides shutting the Male Students up, he had this corny and eyerolling speech in order to just get the girls. You even didn't really help much considering that most of his male classmates are completely not-normal that just pushes the girls towards the MC. Heck, you pretty gave Rito a foul mouth which i questioned why even. Do you really need to make him that troublesome just for Haruna to easily fall in love with the MC? The MC really killed my enjoyment of the story. He is just so generic in personality with nothing really making him fun to read. Systems and Powers are just nothing if the MC is a bore.

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