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2024-11-14 23:52

La novela no es tan mala, pero hay cosas que la estropean (En mi opinión personal): 1.- Copiar y pegar la información de wikipedia y wikifans, es decir esta bien que describas personajes y poderes, pero tiene que ser solo un párrafo... no todo el capítulo. 2.- Agregar infinidad de personajes femeninos y lo peor es que son de diferentes mundos. ¿Qué es esto, pokemon waifus? 3.- Pokemon waifus de todo el omniverso, es decir el protagonista "convoca" mujeres de otros mundos y básicamente son muñecas sexual3s esclavas con el cerebro lavado. Esto vuelve mas confusa la novela y reduce el desarrollo de los personajes originales de ese mundo. Además, en ese anime, es innecesario traer otros personajes de otros mundos (anime, manga, comic, hentai, juegos...). 4.- El autor quiere alargar su novela con relleno perjudicial. El relleno es agregar nuevos personajes indefinidamente. Autor, toda novela tiene inicio y final. Toda novela tienen una cantidad de personajes limitados.

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While the story had an interesting and fun concept with a good start, everything kinda just went downhill. Good Ideas but not really good execution. Structure of the story is a mess especially when chapters are just full of massive infodumps that really explains a lot too much. A simple summary is better and having such an infodump during situations just messes up the pacing and flow of the story. Yeah sure its their to explain things to people who are unfamiliar with the anime or manga but some of them are just completely unessecary. You don't need to tell the readers as if they want to learn more, they can just search for it themselves if they are fully interested in it. The true main issue that the story suffers is the MC. While yes it was fun having him takeover a side character, the MC's personality overall was just generic nice guy which kinda became boring and eyerolling. He even has some cluelessness which just was annoying. I expected him to have some personality but really he is no different than the generic harem nice guy which most of the girls like because he is nice. Its especially obvious with the whole situation with Kakinozaka as besides shutting the Male Students up, he had this corny and eyerolling speech in order to just get the girls. You even didn't really help much considering that most of his male classmates are completely not-normal that just pushes the girls towards the MC. Heck, you pretty gave Rito a foul mouth which i questioned why even. Do you really need to make him that troublesome just for Haruna to easily fall in love with the MC? The MC really killed my enjoyment of the story. He is just so generic in personality with nothing really making him fun to read. Systems and Powers are just nothing if the MC is a bore.

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