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Sir_StrongholdLv156mth
2024-10-14 22:22

read to chapter 4 so far. I really like the start. my only complaint was the introduction of a system but that's my fault for not checking the tags. I like the idea and the writing but I'm tired of systems so I'm not sure I'll continue reading or not. But keep up the good work 👍

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DaoistmvWChj
DaoistmvWChjAuthor

Aside from the rewards for achievements, status and descriptions, the system is not going to be that important, in fact in the future when he goes to other worlds, I want to seal the system and his skills so that he becomes stronger with his own effort, in the end the strength he gains in those worlds will be added to the one he already has in his original world.

Afonso_Aaron
Afonso_AaronLv5

hey there author can you tell me how big the hárèm going to ?

DaoistmvWChj:Aside from the rewards for achievements, status and descriptions, the system is not going to be that important, in fact in the future when he goes to other worlds, I want to seal the system and his skills so that he becomes stronger with his own effort, in the end the strength he gains in those worlds will be added to the one he already has in his original world.
DaoistmvWChj
DaoistmvWChjAuthor

I'm not sure yet, I'll make it big only if I can make it work well, if not then it won't be as many

Afonso_Aaron:hey there author can you tell me how big the hárèm going to ?
Afonso_Aaron
Afonso_AaronLv5

I see, if you decide to make it big you got to add every female characters or at least most from To love ru. Anyways keep up the good work Author 👍

DaoistmvWChj:I'm not sure yet, I'll make it big only if I can make it work well, if not then it won't be as many
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Garland
GarlandLv4

While the story had an interesting and fun concept with a good start, everything kinda just went downhill. Good Ideas but not really good execution. Structure of the story is a mess especially when chapters are just full of massive infodumps that really explains a lot too much. A simple summary is better and having such an infodump during situations just messes up the pacing and flow of the story. Yeah sure its their to explain things to people who are unfamiliar with the anime or manga but some of them are just completely unessecary. You don't need to tell the readers as if they want to learn more, they can just search for it themselves if they are fully interested in it. The true main issue that the story suffers is the MC. While yes it was fun having him takeover a side character, the MC's personality overall was just generic nice guy which kinda became boring and eyerolling. He even has some cluelessness which just was annoying. I expected him to have some personality but really he is no different than the generic harem nice guy which most of the girls like because he is nice. Its especially obvious with the whole situation with Kakinozaka as besides shutting the Male Students up, he had this corny and eyerolling speech in order to just get the girls. You even didn't really help much considering that most of his male classmates are completely not-normal that just pushes the girls towards the MC. Heck, you pretty gave Rito a foul mouth which i questioned why even. Do you really need to make him that troublesome just for Haruna to easily fall in love with the MC? The MC really killed my enjoyment of the story. He is just so generic in personality with nothing really making him fun to read. Systems and Powers are just nothing if the MC is a bore.

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