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Winter_WhispererLv44mth
2024-10-03 20:08

Despite my initial reluctance to read another work of Ein, seeing EPIC I have no choice but to read it. It is the first fanfic I have ever read and has a special place in my heart even with the unsatisfying ending it got. Anyways to review this story - Writing Quality 5 🌟 There was never a problem with the quality of Ein's writing. - Story Development 4 🌟 The story is progressing a lot faster than it's predecessor which I like. One of the major downside of EPIC was the pacing issue. But that said I do think the romance aspect is rushed. Since it is already written it can't be changed but I hoped the romance to take a stepback for a while longer and focus more on setting the story and scene going. Character Design 5 🌟 It's Vahn. The biggest flaw of Vahn in the previous EPIC was his depression and naivety. which is reasonable with what he went through and has been addressed. But I hope for this Vahn to be more aware of himself and not be a pushover. Updating Stability 5 🌟 2 chaps a day has been promised and delivered. Word Background 4 🌟 Due to the fast pacing I think world building has been compromised a bit. A big strength of the previous EPIC was the world building. note to einlion: please don't make this a pokemon harem. Harem is all fine and dandy but when he gets will every single girl in the verse and smut in every 5 chapters, it gets stale very quickly. Also it would be great if Vahn can have some meaningful friends. some actual male friends.

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Winter_WhispererLv4

And it seems my reluctance was proven to be correct as Rias while dating Vahn is in bed with Issei. Naked. This is in line with Canon but seriously, there were dozens of ways to prevent this. This author is simply incapable of learning from his mistakes.

EinlionAuthor

What mistake? It's not like they crossed the line, and it's a deliberate point of contention in the story.

Winter_Whisperer:And it seems my reluctance was proven to be correct as Rias while dating Vahn is in bed with Issei. Naked. This is in line with Canon but seriously, there were dozens of ways to prevent this. This author is simply incapable of learning from his mistakes.
Winter_WhispererLv4

Yeah, I get it. But it's frustrating. Don't mind it too much. My expectations were just not match so I got annoyed. I won't comment too much but I'll keep reading for now.

Einlion:What mistake? It's not like they crossed the line, and it's a deliberate point of contention in the story.
Ivan_D_6161Lv2

No... Bruh, no... Well, it was said to Ein a lot of times, so has no sense to repeat....

Winter_Whisperer:And it seems my reluctance was proven to be correct as Rias while dating Vahn is in bed with Issei. Naked. This is in line with Canon but seriously, there were dozens of ways to prevent this. This author is simply incapable of learning from his mistakes.
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boxessssssLv4

Ok being honest it's far from the worst thing to read on webnovel. But it's a sequel to epic which means I've gone into this looking for the same feelings I got in the first chapters of epic which was full of cool powers and great fights, before dropping into a 50/50 smut/story mix after chapter 100ish from memory which is where my interest became a lot more lacklustre. Now trying not to spoil much, the outright lemons are dialed back about 80% or more but that's just them being replaced by fade to blacks and such, as a trade off vahn has already got an expansive group gunning for his bed in the first 20 chapters and it just gets worse from there. The powers are much less creatively shown as of this point in the story, there's not a whole lot of true developmental struggle for vahn in the slightest, not a single fight that I can even remember so far (if they've even been written out in favour of the fic being packed for of honestly awful romance) unlike a number I can still recall from the original to this day (e.g. the solo Rex fight). I'm tempted to mark this as spoiler purely because the plot so far is vahn walks into a room/area, flirting/foreplay ensues, gloss over anything else plausibly interesting and onto the next scene. It's rather disappointing from a writer where I've seen the heights they started from and was genuinely interested to see that quality come back but I haven't seen it yet. I'll keep reading as long as the flicker of hope I have lasts but I do not recommend this at all for people looking for a halfway creative or interesting fanfic cause I can no longer trust that you would find it.

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