I will give a detailed review of the fanfiction. The story is a quick and enjoyable read but the are a lot of things that can be improved. Positives: 1. Excellent idea for the story, haven't see may stories with Sasuke as a protagonist and even then the start with death of Orochimaru was also unique. 2. We are not following the cannon and the butterfly effect are also accounted for. 3. Sasuke strength( he is quite op which could be a good read depending on execution Negitives(things that can be improved) 1. The charecter interactions have much left to be desired( they seem a bit lifeless like they do not have any of their own thoughts or every thing they do is for or against. 2. He is too op or the enemies are nerfed( it would have been better if he started with abilities but had to adapt to them or had some serious challanges to grow rather that 1 shot them.( Orochimaru and Deidera fight was justified ,orochimaru being weak and deidera not being a hand to hand combatant but itach, and pain fights could have been more detailed or have been better). Fights are also too short or doesn't have the thrill(could be because author is still learning. Also while he is strong because of him not having sasuke memories, he should not know how to plan battle strategies ( like in pokemon, using speed and prority moves or combination attacks) so sauske while having strength should strugle which he is not 3. Some one said that the plot is forced which feels that way but that could be seemlessly bleded with better and detailed writting style(like giving situation of other villages even if it doesn't immediately effect the time line.) 4. sasuke is a hypocrite or the guy who becaome sasuke(we know very little of him) so we dont know his morlas but when the sound village rules had the harrasement(it seemed that he had morls) but then the way he behaved with Tsunade and Hinnata.(even others like if you want me be with me if not leave= which is also not helped with the lack of charectes personalities ) Overall the novel has potential if improved upon (but also make sure not over do it like drang fights for so long or make focus only on charecter reactions to evens). giving it a solid 3.2 of 5 (compared to others on the platform) A 5/5 recomendation [Naruto: the wind Calamity]

As Sasuke With 10-Quest System

PurpleRoseImmortal

3.5

87 Chs