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Zexeli
ZexeliLv123mth
2024-10-21 07:38

Thi deserves a beer ๐Ÿป but you should really fix your paragraphs ._.

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lyonciv0
lyonciv0Author

it gets better later on

Zexeli
ZexeliLv12

You should still fix them ๐Ÿ˜‚

lyonciv0:it gets better later on
lyonciv0
lyonciv0Author

Zexeli:You should still fix them ๐Ÿ˜‚
lyonciv0
lyonciv0Author

I want the novel to get better the more you read it

Zexeli:You should still fix them ๐Ÿ˜‚
Zexeli
ZexeliLv12

The story should be getting better, we did not come and watch how u improve your paragraphs ๐Ÿ˜ญ

lyonciv0:I want the novel to get better the more you read it
lyonciv0
lyonciv0Author

๐Ÿ˜‡๐Ÿ˜‚ part of it

Zexeli:The story should be getting better, we did not come and watch how u improve your paragraphs ๐Ÿ˜ญ
Zexeli
ZexeliLv12

Oml ๐Ÿ˜‚๐Ÿ˜‚๐Ÿ˜ญ๐Ÿป

lyonciv0:๐Ÿ˜‡๐Ÿ˜‚ part of it
lyonciv0
lyonciv0Author

๐Ÿ˜Ž

Zexeli:Oml ๐Ÿ˜‚๐Ÿ˜‚๐Ÿ˜ญ๐Ÿป
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