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Project_Paladin
Project_PaladinLv43mth
2024-09-21 15:38

This is a really good story, we have a good balance between plot and action, the characters have meaningful interactions and the idea behind this is just great, on top of that the system is only there to give power through the struggles and growth of the Mc not to give missions or control him.

Marvel: Video Game Templates!

StrikerAuthor
4.4
53 Chs

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scyfly
scyflyLv4

there is a severe lack of flow. 'the bigger problem was his memories. his memories...' it sounds so broken, if he just said 'they' then it was clear it means the previously mentioned memories. go read the first chapter and cound how many times he opens with 'he or his...' its more of a summeration then a story. and now im kinda interested why you think this is so good. cause to me even the plot is shaky, he killed his attackers so how did hydra learn about his ability?

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scyfly
scyflyLv4

nvm author is an idiot. this is more swiss cheese than plot

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ArcAng3l
ArcAng3lLv14

Loving the book so far man!! Keep them chapters coming.

3mth

Zeikfried
ZeikfriedLv5

The SI is subsumed by the OC, but the problem is that there is zero character development. That means that when the main character goes out to do his thing, the motivation is 1 dimensional (revenge). There isn't a puddle of depth to what he's actually trying to accomplish or what he's going to do later on. I'm fairly certain the video game aspect of this story is interchangeable with any other power/system/cheat. It's probably not going to impact the narrative in any meaningful way aside from letting the MC stomp all his enemies.

2mth
i_like_catwoman
i_like_catwomanLv4

for the next template , here are some that i hope you will consider delsin rowe ( infamous second son ) dante ( devil may cry ) as they are strong but not too strong for marvel and for really strong characters kratos ( god of war ) sun wukong ( black myth wukong ) and you cannot forget elden ring and Hogwarts legacy for magic based powers and you should also add a shop where mc can buy the weapons of the template like Dante's rebellion and kratos blades of chaos

3mth
DaoistXs9r4W
DaoistXs9r4WLv2

En lo personal creo que la idea era interesante pero tiene mucho por mejorar empezando desde el principio más que todo la forma en que de repente paso a decir que están asustado e impotente a convertirse en un asesino despiadado que podía escapar con facilidad, primero que hay que hacer en una historia es lograr cercanía o simpatía del lector por el personaje y luego volver más poderoso haciéndolo pasar por dificultades reales en un proceso de al menos algunos capítulos ya que de otra forma se siente forzado o como si el protagonista no se mereciera ese poder, también me parece que hay muchas lagunas como por ejemplo porque agentes de hidra que deberían haber pasado por entrenamiento militar, combate, espía, sicológico entre otros como de tortura y tener lavado de cerebro para morir por una causa se asustarían y entraran en pánico tan fácilmente, en esas condiciones no deberia haber salido ileso de su primera batalla, además de como logro averiguar toda estructura de la base secreta y horarios de los guardias si en teoría solo debería conocer el camino y las salas a las donde lo mantuvieron encerrado y entrenado, además de que los métodos de hidra tienden a ser extremadamente meticulosos y engañosos utilizando a su hermana como una amenaza y un seguro para mantenerlo obediente y leal.

3mth
Aayush_storms
Aayush_stormsLv4

This deserves 5 stars hope you complete this fic keep up the great work.

3mth
Silas_Savitar_
Silas_Savitar_Lv3

I really like it so far, grammar is fine, MC is well constructed and not overpowered, new chapters regularly. One of the better Marvel fiction, hope it stays this good.

3mth
LAMPSHAD3
LAMPSHAD3Lv14

The grammar is a little bad, but not terrible. Everything else is great. It's one of the better Marvel fics.

3mth
gutless
gutlessLv15

good writing and the themes done right so far. he doesn't progress too fast or too slow either.

3mth
birtek89
birtek89Lv3

What's killing this story is this excess of side plots. Chapters and chapters where the MC can't even be called a supporting character. And these are plots that aren't even interesting, they barely contribute to anything and only serve to increase the number of words. The plot has to be focused exclusively on the MC, since in addition to the MC being an introduced character, he is a reincarnator and must always be built and improved. The way things are, it seems that sometimes the MC is remembered, and then he quickly grows so many % in strength with the system, and this isn't even developed properly in the story. The system ends up as a boring crutch, used to justify the MC's sudden increase in strength, which is really boring. If it doesn't change, it will be just another story to leave out. I always make the observation that the author can and should write whatever he wants and have fun doing it, since it's a non-profit thing, but what's the point of publishing the story if the readers don't even bother to read it because the story becomes so boring.

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