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2024-09-17 07:31

En lo personal creo que la idea era interesante pero tiene mucho por mejorar empezando desde el principio más que todo la forma en que de repente paso a decir que están asustado e impotente a convertirse en un asesino despiadado que podía escapar con facilidad, primero que hay que hacer en una historia es lograr cercanía o simpatía del lector por el personaje y luego volver más poderoso haciéndolo pasar por dificultades reales en un proceso de al menos algunos capítulos ya que de otra forma se siente forzado o como si el protagonista no se mereciera ese poder, también me parece que hay muchas lagunas como por ejemplo porque agentes de hidra que deberían haber pasado por entrenamiento militar, combate, espía, sicológico entre otros como de tortura y tener lavado de cerebro para morir por una causa se asustarían y entraran en pánico tan fácilmente, en esas condiciones no deberia haber salido ileso de su primera batalla, además de como logro averiguar toda estructura de la base secreta y horarios de los guardias si en teoría solo debería conocer el camino y las salas a las donde lo mantuvieron encerrado y entrenado, además de que los métodos de hidra tienden a ser extremadamente meticulosos y engañosos utilizando a su hermana como una amenaza y un seguro para mantenerlo obediente y leal.

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I haven't started reading yet. QUESTION: is the trauma of the previous body owner passed over? I want to know if its a proper revenge story where mc will kill all his enemies(including random grunts) or just the leaders. QUESTION 2: is mc an idiot or a genius?

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