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2024-10-05 22:07

This fic isn’t really about DBZ, but that’s not a bad thing. It brings a fresh twist, even if it strays pretty far from the original. The writing is better than a lot of the trash you see on Webnovel, but it’s still pretty average. The main issue is the MC—he often comes off as a moron and mostly thinks with his hormones. The author’s Pokémon-style harem adds to the trashy vibe. Some other problems can be brushed off, but this one’s hard to ignore. The idea is interesting, but it definitely needs some work. (Note: The language has been toned down using AI because Webnovel wouldn't accept the original review.)

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