OK... The Mc is the make or break of any story , especially transmigration/reincarnation ones . And this fanfic just proves that . Eragon here is essentially arrogant ; somewhat tolerable at the start but now he is just unbearable. So if you dislike arrogance and you don't have an obsession with getting women or looking good. If you don't like MCs gloating about how good they have become every few paragraphs, DO NOT touch this fic. There are other sources to get yourself irritated, no need to suffer here. My next problem with this fic is writing. The author has ok grammar, but grammar isn't everything . The prose in accordance to the source material and the setting is "out of touch" ,to put it lightly. All characters often use modern words , which absolutely obliterates any immersion for me. Finally the system interface is useless. The resistance displays are very vague . (This message is for the author , as advice)Please when you use levels for progression , provide a scale. How strong are elves? how strong is a human . What value does a level has? what does 100 lvl mean. Everything is scattered. And while this is very convenient for you, as it allows you to adjust things for *PLOT*, for readers its a dropper. My advice to the author is "Rewrite". Make the Mc tolerable . Fix the writing and sentence making . Fix the system for god sakes. #3 Stars Look I also want a good Eragon fanfic , and while I have dropped the fic (until its improved), I wish you all the best.
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