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FallenAngelN
FallenAngelNLv114mth
2024-07-24 05:27

First of all, I want to say that I don't actually think the story deserves one star. This is given more for balance. The story is actually rather good, but not great. I can someone appreciate this inspiration from Elden ring making the main character after messmer but also just copy/pasting the dragon from elden ring went a bit too far into lazy territory, and became a negative. The story itself does have good qualities, but it's simply missing satisfaction. The story in the beginning constantly jumps around with the main characters age with zero explanation. One moment he's four, then he's eight, then 12, now 17. These time jumps happen with very little warning or explanation. It feels like many steps are just skipped over, leading to things feeling unsatisfying. Rather than seeing his growth, we only see the bullet points of it like the author is just trying to rush to the good stuff, and can't be bothered filling in the gaps. It is also rather unsatisfying that right after powering up and achieving his divinity, he just ends up losing twice right after that. Like I said, the story is good, but not great. I would normally give it about three and a half stars.

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Stingleese
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Loosing twice? To who?

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FallenAngelN
FallenAngelNLv11

A bit odd that you're focusing on that aspect out of the others, but alright. Thena is the first one, this one isn't so bad. The second one is Lansseax, it's played off like a tie, but the dragon woke up before him, and could have killed him, but didn't. So that's definitely a loss.

Stingleese:Loosing twice? To who?
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Lucius_SS
Lucius_SSLv4

If you dont believe it deserves one star, dont give it one star. You think your opinion is that much more important that you rate it lower just so the overall rating goes to what YOU think it deserves is arrogant.

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FallenAngelN
FallenAngelNLv11

I don't care.

Lucius_SS:If you dont believe it deserves one star, dont give it one star. You think your opinion is that much more important that you rate it lower just so the overall rating goes to what YOU think it deserves is arrogant.
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Lucius_SS
Lucius_SSLv4

Seems like you care a little too much, given you rated it less than you think it deserves.

FallenAngelN:I don't care.
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