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Bk_Vybez
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2024-08-13 22:34

hey author congrats on your story but I'd like to ask, why does it feel like your mc is dumb . I mean he's in a fantasy world where the strong prey on the weak and he's weak right now so shouldn't the right choice in this situation be to increase his strength by leveraging on his current acquaintances instead of jumping headfirst into situations without thinking for god sake he was a 30 year old b4 reincarnation so shouldn't common sense make him u know a little distrustful of people's intentions instead of him taking things at face value. I'm really frustrated because I like your writing but the story is just unrealistic. it's like a fairy tale where everyone is kind to each other. sorry about the yapping but i just hate indecisive naive mc's

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Elias_Nightwalker
Elias_NightwalkerAuthor

Newbie mistakes! Yeah, what should I say, I am a newbie..I am trying to improve. Good to know your thoughts. Maybe I will edit those chapters in the future 😊.

Elias_Nightwalker
Elias_NightwalkerAuthor

You would see gradual improvement after chapter 30+

Bk_Vybez
Bk_VybezLv3

Good to know I like your writing style though,just make sure to improve these kinda inconsistencies and you're good to go don't give up

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DeathThunder
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The story is very good with good world buliding and interesting characters. but author should increase the word counts of chapters (they are too short) [{Suggestion}] ≈ ✓) If mc & others get laws in future I think this will be the perfect combination for their personality, current power, character wise. Mc : [ Space, Time, Void, Energy, Lighting, Force (forces including gravity magnetism...), Cosmos (like quasar, cosmic energy, radiation...) ] Bella : [ Moon, Darkness, Mind, Fire ] Aria : [ Sun, Light, Shadow, Nature ] Other characters : [ ice, wind, water, earth, sound, blood, wood, metal, poison, corruption ] {You can decrease or change laws for Fml & others but MC's combination is perfect I think.} ✓) If mc gets all laws exist that will be too boaring because he will be too overpowered & readers can't see the full potential of all his laws. so that's why I suggest this combination. This way we can watch the full potential of all laws respectively & the others also stand side by side/against with mc in near future ✓) assimilate same manipulation type skill into same law to increase proficiency (like fire manipulation skill will automatically assimilate to fire law) ✓) limit the number of laws one can have (like mc can wield 7 because his vast soul but others can only wield limited no of laws) ✓) Please explain some power dynamic their were cases when author just skip them (like sub skills, assimilation of same skill, condition for synthesis, the power increase in unique skill related to mc level etc) If you keep this mind in future the novel will get more interesting for readers in my opinion.

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