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VowOfPride
VowOfPrideLv25mth
2024-11-08 04:59

You only get such a low score mainly due to your writing being awful, I'm not gonna sugarcoat it because then you wouldn't learn from it. This entire story sounds like it was written by an 8-year-old. I suggest using either Grammarly or QuillBot Ai, they don't instantly make your writer better, but they can scan your text tell you what's wrong, and give you ideas on how to improve.

Danmachi: Bell Gojo through the fictional Multiverse

WRizz1
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149 Chs

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EyeOfSilver
EyeOfSilverLv13

100% your the type to get mad at AI grammar yet your telling him to use AI fr it's a closed loop guys

3mth
EyeOfSilver
EyeOfSilverLv13

plus u lost your novel it's gone :( so sad

3mth
E2DWYER
E2DWYERLv4

What are you arguing about? He's right, the writing is dreadful.

EyeOfSilver:plus u lost your novel it's gone :( so sad
2mth
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EyeOfSilver
EyeOfSilverLv13

??? state some evidence some paragraphs do some references to chapter and lines like actual criticism or just shut the fuck up bud

E2DWYER:What are you arguing about? He's right, the writing is dreadful.
2mth
EyeOfSilver
EyeOfSilverLv13

Your opinion is shit fuck off. See I did the same as you now fuck off or you can cry about it I aint dealing with people like you if its bad say what's bad and give evidence don't just throw around dumb shit

E2DWYER:What are you arguing about? He's right, the writing is dreadful.
2mth
EyeOfSilver
EyeOfSilverLv13

Gonna block you so u don't corrupt my feed with twitter opinions

E2DWYER:What are you arguing about? He's right, the writing is dreadful.
2mth
E2DWYER
E2DWYERLv4

Imagine arguing against a fact and calling it a twitter opinion.

EyeOfSilver:Gonna block you so u don't corrupt my feed with twitter opinions
1mth
Other Reviews
JapaOuO
JapaOuOLv4

Author, I think you had a good idea for the story, but you still need to improve your writing quality a little. As another guy commented, you need more description of the scenes, and also better formatting, because there are places that needed a paragraph and don't have one... but the idea is good, your writing stability is also good, you just need to improve your writing and you'll be a good writer.

6mth

elpepe
elpepeLv2

It's entertaining, so that your inspiration doesn't go away you should upload chapters every two or three days, obviously the chapters being longer, or else short chapters but every day, in the end it's you who decides.

7mth
WRizz1
WRizz1Author

How do you feel this story should progress? Please comment, as I need your opinions to improve my story if there is something that people think is missing.

7mth
Xander_Paz
Xander_PazLv4

es el clásico Isekai del tipo que dice todas mías, amigo la estructura de la escritura necesita trabajo, es algo difícil de leer el protagonista no tiene peso ni sustancia. se siente muy monótono la historia.

5mth
Duke100god
Duke100godLv4

you should make it more descriptive .....

7mth
An_Unknown_Writer
An_Unknown_WriterLv4

Writing quality 1-star Hard to read and has 700 word chapters. Updating stability 1-star The story is dropped Story development 2-Star The main character is strong from the start so there is not really any good story to develop Character design 3-Star Acts similar to Gojo but as mentioned before he is strong from the start causing the reader to not see his growth causing a lack of care for the character World background 4-star It’s Danmachi but a little messed up

1mth
E2DWYER
E2DWYERLv4

I got excited when I saw a Gojo danmachi story, but the writing quality makes it unbearable.

2mth
Netherios00Zaphire
Netherios00ZaphireLv4

Reveal spoiler

5mth
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