You only get such a low score mainly due to your writing being awful, I'm not gonna sugarcoat it because then you wouldn't learn from it. This entire story sounds like it was written by an 8-year-old. I suggest using either Grammarly or QuillBot Ai, they don't instantly make your writer better, but they can scan your text tell you what's wrong, and give you ideas on how to improve.

Author, I think you had a good idea for the story, but you still need to improve your writing quality a little. As another guy commented, you need more description of the scenes, and also better formatting, because there are places that needed a paragraph and don't have one... but the idea is good, your writing stability is also good, you just need to improve your writing and you'll be a good writer.

How do you feel this story should progress? Please comment, as I need your opinions to improve my story if there is something that people think is missing.

es el clásico Isekai del tipo que dice todas mías, amigo la estructura de la escritura necesita trabajo, es algo difícil de leer el protagonista no tiene peso ni sustancia. se siente muy monótono la historia.

you should make it more descriptive .....

Writing quality 1-star Hard to read and has 700 word chapters. Updating stability 1-star The story is dropped Story development 2-Star The main character is strong from the start so there is not really any good story to develop Character design 3-Star Acts similar to Gojo but as mentioned before he is strong from the start causing the reader to not see his growth causing a lack of care for the character World background 4-star It’s Danmachi but a little messed up

I got excited when I saw a Gojo danmachi story, but the writing quality makes it unbearable.

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