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Wesam296
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2024-09-07 15:48

Umm, the novel is really amazing in my opinion and has great potential, but it is kinda taking too long to start with the world and development and stuff, because until now I have noticed that the chapters are like 35% info dump, 20% describing the room or the clothes or whatever, 25% s*x scenes, and 20% actual story development and stuff, I would really like to focus more on the development because it becomes kinda annoying when I read a new chapter everyday only to find that 50% or something of the chapter is just info about whatever something he is using instead of just a simple description, makes me want to leave the novel until it accumulates like 500 chapters to have a decent read and get a decent development. But hey I love the story in general and can’t wait to see him being OP against the people who will find out how strong he and his family are later on, that’s why I keep waiting wanting to see what’s going to happen, but it just doesn’t go that way in the story, or it is just not moving on to see how he is going to make the city his the chamber of commerce workings or the sect and stuff like that you know. Thanks for reading my opinion, and sorry if you take offense to my criticism. (English is not my native language, so there may be grammar mistakes here and there in the comment, so sorry in advance)

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I can only agree to your comment. Way too much time is spent on describing items when he gets them only to use a few phrases when the MC uses the item. Good story but infodump is Killing the it..

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