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Vassitri
VassitriLv158mth
2024-08-29 20:20

as of chapter 141 I've enjoyed the story. the world building is slow but detailed, characters are distinct, but could use a bit more detail. the storyline is good as well. my biggest complaint is the constant change of he/him/she/her. characters are introduced and referred to as male, then 2 paragraphs later are "she/her" then back to male again. dozens of chapters after a character was introduced (Yara) I still have no idea if they are a man or woman because of the pronouns changing constantly. this problem is not exclusive to this character, but as a whole, pronouns are constantly flip-flopped.

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Doubleyolkeggs
DoubleyolkeggsAuthor

I will try my best to check it thoroughly in the future

Ahri_Gumiho
Ahri_GumihoLv15

So…you’re saying it’s probably machine translated and then edited after?

Vassitri
VassitriLv15

I don't want to make any accusations on this, but it did cross my mind that it may have been written in another language and then mtl to English. it always feels odd when he/she him/her are flip flopped regularly

Ahri_Gumiho:So…you’re saying it’s probably machine translated and then edited after?
mujaki2
mujaki2Lv15

it's an ongoing thing. mina the alchemist is bald with a long beard. yet for 80 chapters is described as "she"

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