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daniel_rahn
daniel_rahnLv29mth
2024-07-21 20:54

The concept and development is so great, also i like this authors book is just that... i cant keep with this 2nd person thing, sorry i really tried author but it kills all the inmerssion, sure i can do the patreon thing or whatever to ask you to change the narrative but 1) i dont like to give money to authors when i feel that i HAD yo do this in order to motivates them, i feel that if for some reason i stoped paying because its needed then they will stop or drop, 2) you have already dropped a few good novels so what garanty to i have you wont drop this after the change? Its simply not worth the risk, anyway, tell me if someone else paid you to change the whole novel or if you do another similar novel with a normal pov. Excluding that good novel, keep the good work 😁

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Avi2112
Avi2112Author

Thank you soo much for your kind words!! 😊😊 It's fine if you can't pay, maybe someone else will use there points to change it someday 😅😅

daniel_rahn
daniel_rahnLv2

Will cross my fingers xD 🤞🤞

Avi2112:Thank you soo much for your kind words!! 😊😊 It's fine if you can't pay, maybe someone else will use there points to change it someday 😅😅
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Honestly this fanfic really had good potential, but from chapter 50~ things went down for me pretty fast. The grammar and plot are good, and the $ex scenes were excellent. But from the the moment the MC got his powers and actively used them in fights I found myself bored and frustrated. Once I got to chapter 136 I've stopped reading and decided to drop the fanfic and leave a review of my opinion why the fanfic failed draw me in as the story progressed. Here are a few points of what I believe to be the problem: 1) MC was nerfed so hard it's not even funny. The MC received many awesome and powerful abilities by sleeping around, such as Chi Manipulation and Transcendent Human Physiology among other physical enhancement abilities, yet he still struggles to defeat even normal humans. His abilities are always nerfed and fights that the MC should win in a single punch gets draged to last 1-2 chapters. His precognition ability never works and he wasn't able to avoid any trouble or ambush coming his way, unlike Madam Web from whom he got the power to begin with. And so on in many situations. 2) The MC and his friends/subordinates act like typical DC heroes (even though this is a Marvel fanfic) and hardly if ever kill the bad guys, only knocking them out. This leads to the bad guys later coming back for revenge stronger and better, repeating the arcs in a boring fashion. 3) The author can't write a good fighting scene. I'm not saying this to discourage the author, I'm just stating a fact. In all the various fighting scenes in this fanfic I found myself frustrated and bored, both from the flow of the fight and from the chapters length. It was like even without the MC things go down as it did in the original movies and comics, and sometimes even worse, as the MC is completely useless and nerfed, so what's the point of reading it? I didn't want to read about Tony fighting against Obadiah, I just want to read about the MC. Again, I'm not saying this to discourage the author, he sure knows how to write excellent $ex scenes and did a good plot, but unfortunately not exciting fighting scenes. 4) The MC's childish personality and actions. He was reincarnated from birth, which makes his mental age 40+ yet he still acts without thinking and do meaningless things. For instance, the MC went and followed daredevil one night for no reason whatsoever and somehow insisted on joining him in taking out a russian mafia without any planning or investigating the place first. This led to them falling to an ambush and a frustrating fight that almost got the MC killed numerous times. To sum it up, I think that if the MC was OP, that would solve most of the problems I mentioned and would also explain why all the hot women keep flock to the MC like they do. I would still give this fanfic a 4.5 star review cuz I can understand and appreciate the author's hard work.

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