Hello, I read the story and I must say it's good, but there are some things I don't like.An example would be writing,Sometimes it is difficult to read, for example, the third person, sometimes during the narration Oscar suddenly says something in the middle of the narration, and that is a bit confusing,What I want to suggest is at least if you want the character to speak with his name and then a colon so as not to confuse , example: Oscar: oh no, Beacon is going to fall, I have to avoid it. It is also better that you end the narration so that the character can speak, not that in the middle of the narration the character says something and continues the narration as if no one had spoken. Well, this is all the problem I had. Thank you for reading. I'm sorry if my English is bad.

it's looking good so far so keep up the amazing work

This is a fun read and a fun story, so far i have enjoyed it very much, would have been 5 star if not for the First 4 Ch, Other wishes this is a good and enjoyable story, So people don't Judge it by the first 4 Ch

So what do I think of the story? it not bad but it dose need work. The story in it self is good, good pacing maybe a bit slow but that’s not a bad thing. Over all it is a good read