Hello, I read the story and I must say it's good, but there are some things I don't like.An example would be writing,Sometimes it is difficult to read, for example, the third person, sometimes during the narration Oscar suddenly says something in the middle of the narration, and that is a bit confusing,What I want to suggest is at least if you want the character to speak with his name and then a colon so as not to confuse , example: Oscar: oh no, Beacon is going to fall, I have to avoid it. It is also better that you end the narration so that the character can speak, not that in the middle of the narration the character says something and continues the narration as if no one had spoken. Well, this is all the problem I had. Thank you for reading. I'm sorry if my English is bad.

Sinceramente nunca voy a entender a los autores que hacen a su MC parte Grim ... Osea esa transformación en su puta vida va a poder usarla frente a la gente es estúpido pensar que solo porque es un cazador la gente va a verlo y decir Woo un cazador medio grim quiero ser como el cuando sea grande.......en realidad la reacción más normal y la lógica sería maten a esa basura antes de que reproduzca..( no trato de ofender pero tenía que decirlo)

One question, if this is a rewrite of the previous version, does it mean that you will make several changes to it because if so, I'm looking forward to it in another note since you made a story giving Oscar the lead role instead of the usual thing, which would be to use Jaune or ruby otaught that in the future you could do a husttia using whitley to see how you get on developing the skills of the youngest of the schnne otthought you could make it more strategic or combine the glyphs with a fighting style that allows him to use a gun and sword like Nero from DMC(Devil May Cry) What do you think of the idea?

So what do I think of the story? it not bad but it dose need work. The story in it self is good, good pacing maybe a bit slow but that’s not a bad thing. Over all it is a good read

This is not a review but something i am doing for this Fanfic, it is for more interaction with the community so yeah Per week 50 power stones = 1 Bonus Ch 100 power Stones = 2 to 3 Bonus Ch 20 CommentsNew Ch = Bonus Ch for the next Ch (This has to be done in one day, and had too be 20 different people) 40 Comments for new Ch = Double upload the whole next Week (This has to be done in one day, and had too be 40 different people) Keeping this fanfic in the Top 5 = Bonus Ch on Monday

The grammar and misspelling is horrible, I don’t see how you can reread your work even once before posting and not see how bad it is, or at least put it through something like Microsoft Word that will catch all of the spelling mistakes. Beyond just the writing quality it has its problems story wise, plot holes and inconsistencies, and the characters are both different from how they are originally, but also they feel inconsistent with how they are written.

I love RWBY, it's good to see a story with Oscar as the protagonist, the most underrated character in the anime. It's fun to see the character being explored and trained without needing a manipulative idiot full of secrets like Ozpin. I hope your story goes far, friend, don't abandon it out of nowhere.

Why do people make their characters part-insert-creature-here (in this case grim) it just is so damn edgy to me and also it's focking useless because he won't use it in ANY fight if someone else is around him also there is the fact that the grammar sometimes is bad and it's just enough to annoy my retarded ass anyway and it doesn't help the fact that the writing makes me sleepy I will keep but I will keep forcing myself to read since there is no good RWBY fic

Overall good. The main issue is, I think you need someone to read over it and fix the english. That alone could drive people away. but its been a interesting read. Has potential.

it's looking good so far so keep up the amazing work