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SuperAyan
SuperAyanLv1311mth
2024-05-09 08:15

This is book is literally storytelling, the narrations feels like I'm reading a diary, it's on a first point of view. Though some paragraphs are really long, it's kinda exhausting to read without breaks and some missing punctuations only. Author should keep updating too^^

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Rishabh_sharma_RIS
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yeah for first volume it is a story telling but after a second volume it is a adventurous

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Hillstrider
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Well, where should I begin? While I would like to sugar-coat the author's writing, the way they develop the story, and the information the reader swallows, I would like to give an accurate review of the story thus far. However, with the story being only two chapters long as of me writing this review, this should be taken with a grain of salt as the author will inevitably improve, and they have asked me to write this review very early. Let's start off with the writing quality. There may be grammatical errors, but these don't deter you from the plot, so they're not a big deal. The only problem I have is the lack of quotation marks or knowing who is talking to who, and if the character is actually talking or not. The story develops at a normal rate, with the first chapter being significantly shorter than the second, although in the first one it does seem like the author is writing the story in such a way that it feels like they're trying to push the reader on with the story, seeking to "get on with it" already. The character design is solid, but the main character suddenly becoming a gigachad within the first chapter out of nowhere makes it feel a little like they're rushed. I cannot write on the updating stability as of now with only two chapters, so I am average on it. The world background is fairly well described, with the reader knowing their surroundings. All in all, I believe the writer is using their raw talent to write. While talent is excellent to have, I believe talent alone cannot suffice without experience.

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