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Perishable_Heaven
Perishable_HeavenLv111mth
2024-05-01 00:04

Alright, first the carrot. This is a rather interesting working work in the prospective of the author, in taking their experiences and turning into a unique adaptation of fantasy. (As there are only 2 chapter's I can't really comment to much on the fantasy aspect as we are still in the introductory faze of the novel) This Novel offers personality and help bring a new experience to it's readers. Now the Stick. This novel as quiet a few issues with grammar and punctuation and can be hard to read for some individuals. My Honest Opinion: I believe this story can be a interesting read if you can push past some of it's current issues. Genuinely the only issue i have the run on sentences. other than that it's rather easy to read that could easily be a very good book to read. keep up the work.

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Thank you so much 😁

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