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2024-05-16 02:10

The story is missing some *spice*, you know.. It's preatty bland - no humor, steriotipical characters, no butterfly effect, mc thinks he IS Kaido personality wise, 1 hit 1 kill fights. This story is missing a hook that keeps the readers reading. For me tge more I read the harder it was to read the next chapter because nothing interesting happened. Everything is predictable, so there weren't a lot of surprises. Now the system - the system makes the story worse, because the main point of this fanfic was "what would you do if you were Kaido?", obviously the answer wouldn't be you would cheat with a system, right? That defeats the whole purpose of this fanfic idea wise.

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MirageKing
MirageKingLv14

If i was kaidou, i would find a high place to survive the sinking of world :3

TrueImmortalDevil
TrueImmortalDevilLv6

I would raise Yamato as a proper girl and bring her along to travel the world...

MirageKing:If i was kaidou, i would find a high place to survive the sinking of world :3
DaoistBe4bOv
DaoistBe4bOvLv1

Ide bagus

TrueImmortalDevil:I would raise Yamato as a proper girl and bring her along to travel the world...
Ashir_Ahmad
Ashir_AhmadLv4

that does happen in a way because he can't change what has already happened he does take yamato with him to travel raising her

TrueImmortalDevil:I would raise Yamato as a proper girl and bring her along to travel the world...
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Moveton
MovetonLv3

Even though the story is interesting, I just can't understand why people give it such high ratings. at best it's worth a 3/5. This is a typical isekai story with the system and MC overpowered. Narration: The story operates on a simple principle: Kaido goes somewhere, defeats all enemies easily, destroys the surrounding area. There are no interesting dialogues, the characters are all bland, I understand that this is fan fiction and there is no need to retell the backstory of the characters from the very beginning, but they are not even given the appropriate timing, the characters are only needed to show how they fear Kaido, or how much they respect him, nothing more. Plot: The story actually ceases to make sense immediately after the MC receives the first reward from the system, since he was already the strongest character in the story, but he became even stronger and already at the beginning of the 20th chapters he can go and destroy the World, just flying and burning everything with your breath. MS: Not interesting, he has no personal philosophy, all he does is carry out the missions of the system. He doesn't explore the world of ONE PIECE, doesn't try to find treasure, doesn't build his own kingdom, with his own views and preferences, he just does what Kaido would do in the original story with changes in the storyline. The description of the battles is quite interesting and the author conveys the atmosphere of what is happening well, but the battles themselves are not interesting, because the MC is invincible.

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