Hinoka feels so detached from the story, like everything is easy. Bam bam bam, she feels just like a sideliner. There is no emotion to thiss
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LIKEI'm comment more about it. Take in chapter one, it gave an impression that she looked up to her brother and he took care of her, got it. You really let that impression show. Now, we all know hinata was kidnapped, props to you for interfering. We also know that Hiashi isn't the best dad aswell. In the confrontation, you brought out the chakra aura, which made us think something is going to happen. It didn't, it was such a let down. Thinking back to her big brother experience, if she had put paws on hiashi and was all like, 'I'm going to protect my sister, even from you' vibe. I would have sat up, that would have been gold tier. But from a 'genius' we only got a lacklaster, 'ill do better dad'. I 'm not telling you how to write your story or anything, im just saying, where is the drama, where is the plot twist.. give us something.
Thanks for your review, I hope you'll at least give the rest of the book a chance 馃檹
