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drunken_master55Lv1219d
2025-01-29 17:42

The story could've been something good, mostly because it has pretty original story ideas and not something that was more or less copy-pasted from other stories as we often see on this site. HOWEVER, the author completely mucked it up. Grammatical errors often happen in this novel. Sometimes, a paragraph is so beyond terribly written that I wonder what the hell I'm reading. author has a big problem with properly conveying what he wants to say in the text, so you end up stuck in the same paragraph wondering what connection it had to the paragraph before it because the story is all over the place, if that makes sense? and then there's the absolute biggest problem I have with this disappointment, the POV changes all the f***ing time, the protagonist, Loimos is basically a side character, while everyone that isn't him are the main characters. honestly, it's really disappointing how the author has so many other novels before this one, yet his skill as an author is still so amateurish.

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