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covestar
covestarLv1411mth
2024-05-04 05:21

The plot is good, however, stop trying to be fancy with words and speak direct and proper English. Every sentence seems so fancy and it seems like author tries to be poetic but it fails because it comes out as bland. It’s fine to use figure of speech, fancy words, indirect words.. but when the writing is the same throughout, it just seems bland and boring. Infact I struggle to finish a chapter cuz it just sounds the same. Switch up the POV more often and stop with the poetry, it’s a novel not a poem. I admire the effort though. Good Job

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Scarface3699
Scarface3699Lv4

probably ai

covestar
covestarLv14

I didn’t even consider that but now that you mention it, that’s how ai writes its novels..

Minato_Ralte
Minato_RalteLv14

yeah the first thing that came to my mind while reading this novel is the time i used chatgpt for my assignment 🤣

Scarface3699:probably ai
Brezer
BrezerLv14

most ai stories are as you described very pretentious, I have no issue of them using ai but at least admit it at the start.

covestar:I didn’t even consider that but now that you mention it, that’s how ai writes its novels..
DaoistjQtMkq
DaoistjQtMkqLv3

Is there romance?

covestar
covestarLv14

Wayyy later

DaoistjQtMkq:Is there romance?
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