Item: Naruto: My Unique System
Rating: 2
Author: Derami

DeramiLv1411mth

2024-05-12 18:56

obvious AI grammar. Due to it feels like all characters are medieval nobles using flowery speech to the extreme + alot of internal dialogue. Example, Instead of: "He goes to open the door." The grammar is: "With tumultous effort and strength he, with great dedication and perseverance opens the door wondering how he got to this moment as if all the woes he previously went through were not enough to keep the door open for easier access." then extra change some words to ancient grammar and you get it. Not recommending. I really dont't understant those who use this kind of AI grammar, it is just so unnatural and forced...

Naruto: My Unique System

Cloe23

4.5

304 Chs

Liked by 16 people

Replies2

Ototsu_YumeLv11

It's probably for extra word count and to make the typical repetitive CN fanfic style of writing seem 'different'. I wish I read these reviews before trying to read this myself, it had me constantly cringing throughout.

7mth

SAINT_of_ORIGINLv14

oh thank God I read your comment buddy. just saved my time

4mth

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SaishoMysteriarchLv5

I happen to need more reviews under my belt to get an achievement and this has potential so might as well. No need to dance around it long story short, writing style. This story reads more like an academic paper than a fanfic and that is no complement. The words used are just way too sophisticated (accolades, tumultuous, etc). I'm not a native English speaker but I think that I have some pretty good vocabulary, so it's not often and even rare that I have to stop and Google what words mean. And this isn't just the way things are described in third person this also affects the way characters talk, kids shouldn't be talking the same way mediaeval scholars Flirt, no matter how mature they are or even if one of them is reincarnated (except if he came from mediaeval nobility in his past life), in general no one speaks like that, not in this world. This a naruto fic not the retelling of captain Holt's childhood. Okay past all of that let's leave this on a good note no need to leave a bad aftertaste. The Characters are pretty good so far (chapter 7) and the situations are genuinely funny. The system hasn't been shown too much yet but it's the first time I have seen one like it so that's always a plus. Overall a good story held back by the way it's written, I won't assume how you end up with this final product, but a last minute edit by hand to make it more natural will make some massive improvements. Just in general if it's not in a 13 year old's vocabulary it shouldn't be in the fic, at the very least not as often as it is now.

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meHzykLv4

a very interesting story, especially on the premise that he will be a kind of best friend to Minato (at least that's what I deduced) if he isn't, that's okay too. the protagonist also the design of my brother gintoki, one of the best protagonists.

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JantipopoLv14

ai is strong on this one 🙂🙂

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ProfaneImmortalLv14

As of ch. 80: decent enough writing, and a fresh plot. The characters have similar personalities to the original work. No romance yet. I recommend it.

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Nobume_Imai_5090Lv14

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Great read so far

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