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timeawayfromstressLv112mth
2024-04-10 02:32

MC's character development doesn't work like this. MC isn't even supposed to have emotions. He should just be someone who does everything for his goals. He's like someone who got rid of all his weaknesses. You don't even know the character you wrote. MC is like a 16-year-old teenager. But MC has millions of years of memories, he is a different person than he should be with the memories, experiences and skills he receives from the souls.

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LostWizard
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Do you mean millions of years of memories because he absorbs it from the souls or his own? The ones he obtains from eating souls are more like reading a book, in fact he stopped directly integrating them into his mind long ago and is instead forming a book in his library, containing the persons memories. It would be weird if he got affected by their memories, imagine absorbing someone's soul loving and hating people you have never even met. His own memories might be millions of years old but his mental growth is very slow. For us millions of years might be long but for him its equivalent to a few months and you don't mentally and emotionally growth in such a short time

LostWizard
LostWizardAuthor

I welcome constructive critic, suggestions, and questions but the fact that you, a reader, are telling me, the author, that i don't know about my own character is absolute impudence. You talk big but have no actual clue about anything. I suggest you write your own book before giving such nonsense from you

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CTHULHU_YOGSOTHOTH
CTHULHU_YOGSOTHOTHLv4

Oh yes another Idiot sir. What do you want MC to act like? Did you even read all those chapters you idiot piece of shit that can't do anything else except dragging people down because guys like u damn sure know they themselves are a failure so they want others to become failures like them. Piece of shit read the entire thing. And if you think its bad then write a book yourself and make that book have the same views, power stones and support. I am sure you can't since you are a piece of shit that has nothing else to do but try to ruin everyone's work because he thinks nobody can find him in the internet

Hades_Jades
Hades_JadesLv4

Damn chill

CTHULHU_YOGSOTHOTH:Oh yes another Idiot sir. What do you want MC to act like? Did you even read all those chapters you idiot piece of shit that can't do anything else except dragging people down because guys like u damn sure know they themselves are a failure so they want others to become failures like them. Piece of shit read the entire thing. And if you think its bad then write a book yourself and make that book have the same views, power stones and support. I am sure you can't since you are a piece of shit that has nothing else to do but try to ruin everyone's work because he thinks nobody can find him in the internet
Maximus1334
Maximus1334Lv4

you are on goblin mod good sir calm down and you forgot this

CTHULHU_YOGSOTHOTH:Oh yes another Idiot sir. What do you want MC to act like? Did you even read all those chapters you idiot piece of shit that can't do anything else except dragging people down because guys like u damn sure know they themselves are a failure so they want others to become failures like them. Piece of shit read the entire thing. And if you think its bad then write a book yourself and make that book have the same views, power stones and support. I am sure you can't since you are a piece of shit that has nothing else to do but try to ruin everyone's work because he thinks nobody can find him in the internet
timeawayfromstress
timeawayfromstressLv1

ahahaha. I'm tired of brainless people, idiots are everywhere and they write without thinking. You read a novel and you write a good or bad review based on that. You read a part of the novel and if you don't like it, you write a comment based on that. You ate at a restaurant and told the cook that you didn't like the food, the cook said you should have made the food yourself, did your small brain understand? You are a teenage loser and unhappy child in real life. I guess no one even respects you. And you're talking nonsense because no one can find you on the internet.

CTHULHU_YOGSOTHOTH:Oh yes another Idiot sir. What do you want MC to act like? Did you even read all those chapters you idiot piece of shit that can't do anything else except dragging people down because guys like u damn sure know they themselves are a failure so they want others to become failures like them. Piece of shit read the entire thing. And if you think its bad then write a book yourself and make that book have the same views, power stones and support. I am sure you can't since you are a piece of shit that has nothing else to do but try to ruin everyone's work because he thinks nobody can find him in the internet
timeawayfromstress
timeawayfromstressLv1

Some brainless people really don't understand. They can't respond to the answers written and always run away. Who can call these movies with the things they experience and try and the real risk of death. When they send you to the world of reverend insanity, you will be tortured by an evil breeder and you will say that this movie is not real for the rest of your life, then I congratulate you. Hahahaha I read the novel, doesn't your brain work? I even wrote the review accordingly. If you can't respond logically to the answers I wrote in the next comment you write, you are the son of a b**h

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CTHULHU_YOGSOTHOTH
CTHULHU_YOGSOTHOTHLv4

u talk like a insecure petson does ur puny brain not understand the word movie and personally being there. If u think of it like that then u really need to touch grass. Go get help

timeawayfromstress:Some brainless people really don't understand. They can't respond to the answers written and always run away. Who can call these movies with the things they experience and try and the real risk of death. When they send you to the world of reverend insanity, you will be tortured by an evil breeder and you will say that this movie is not real for the rest of your life, then I congratulate you. Hahahaha I read the novel, doesn't your brain work? I even wrote the review accordingly. If you can't respond logically to the answers I wrote in the next comment you write, you are the son of a b**h
CTHULHU_YOGSOTHOTH
CTHULHU_YOGSOTHOTHLv4

This is just a dump topic as of right now. If u still don't know what the diffrence betwwen personally being at a place and experience a thing and mearly watching a video there is a whole dimension diffrence. If u still don't know well. Go get help from a dictionary. I will be leaving this brainless conversation. Also if u still don't understand the diffrence between them then I will give you an example its like this when everyone had family like parents friends and other people and experienced everything personally then that felling would be diffrent then yours who was abondend at Childbirth and had 'head' issues and could only watch everyone family through a video if u still don't understand then I can only say

timeawayfromstress:Some brainless people really don't understand. They can't respond to the answers written and always run away. Who can call these movies with the things they experience and try and the real risk of death. When they send you to the world of reverend insanity, you will be tortured by an evil breeder and you will say that this movie is not real for the rest of your life, then I congratulate you. Hahahaha I read the novel, doesn't your brain work? I even wrote the review accordingly. If you can't respond logically to the answers I wrote in the next comment you write, you are the son of a b**h
CTHULHU_YOGSOTHOTH
CTHULHU_YOGSOTHOTHLv4

timeawayfromstress:Some brainless people really don't understand. They can't respond to the answers written and always run away. Who can call these movies with the things they experience and try and the real risk of death. When they send you to the world of reverend insanity, you will be tortured by an evil breeder and you will say that this movie is not real for the rest of your life, then I congratulate you. Hahahaha I read the novel, doesn't your brain work? I even wrote the review accordingly. If you can't respond logically to the answers I wrote in the next comment you write, you are the son of a b**h
timeawayfromstress
timeawayfromstressLv1

coward. You don't respond to my answers and you run away. One day you won't be able to run away from your problems and I will wait for that day. I don't touch the grass, hahahahahaha. You're the antisocial who doesn't go out, the one who people look at with disgust outside, are you saying this?

CTHULHU_YOGSOTHOTH:This is just a dump topic as of right now. If u still don't know what the diffrence betwwen personally being at a place and experience a thing and mearly watching a video there is a whole dimension diffrence. If u still don't know well. Go get help from a dictionary. I will be leaving this brainless conversation. Also if u still don't understand the diffrence between them then I will give you an example its like this when everyone had family like parents friends and other people and experienced everything personally then that felling would be diffrent then yours who was abondend at Childbirth and had 'head' issues and could only watch everyone family through a video if u still don't understand then I can only say
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CTHULHU_YOGSOTHOTH
CTHULHU_YOGSOTHOTHLv4

Man I genuinely think u should go get help and u talk like a fouth grader that has anger issues man. Go get help man. U need to touch grass. I won't replying after this message[img=recommend]

timeawayfromstress:coward. You don't respond to my answers and you run away. One day you won't be able to run away from your problems and I will wait for that day. I don't touch the grass, hahahahahaha. You're the antisocial who doesn't go out, the one who people look at with disgust outside, are you saying this?
timeawayfromstress
timeawayfromstressLv1

c*ward, you can't answer their questions. and now you're running away. just keep talking nonsense. i'll f**k you on the grass

CTHULHU_YOGSOTHOTH:Man I genuinely think u should go get help and u talk like a fouth grader that has anger issues man. Go get help man. U need to touch grass. I won't replying after this message[img=recommend]
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