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JustAReaders
JustAReadersLv412mth
2023-12-24 22:57

I believe it had potential but my real problem is there are so many skills that have no dominant connection other than the race. She can literally do everything which not only makes your job as an author difficult to make it seems like you mc isn't stupid, but makes reading it confusing even after you fused several skills in a chapter it still made it difficult and in honesty if the plan was to merge them all maybe doing it during system bestowal so you can just get it down with.

Reality Bender System, Marvel

Alex_Simmonds
4.6
396 Chs

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Alex_Simmonds
Alex_SimmondsAuthor

Thanks so much for the review! Thanks also for the feedback I'll have a look into the things you have brought up. (Not promising anything.)

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Alex_Simmonds
Alex_SimmondsAuthor

Shameless Author review! Anyway, this is my first time writing a fan-fiction and i hope you all enjoy it. I plan to have fantasy, sci-fi and other elements scattered throughout the story and plan to have romance in there as well (It will be a Yuri). Please feel free to leave comments, i love them, have a good day/night.

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DaoistyhmT6N
DaoistyhmT6NLv4

looks great so far! the mc is cool story is nice abd the system is kind of unique

1yr
Wizardlyllc
WizardlyllcLv13

nah it not stail it actually pretty great story😁 so so pretty please continue your amazing work author🥺 ps. and don't let no one read this part I might get hate mail for this but I have say this author I like story but you need get some rest maybe a few days or a week. it can't be writing new characters everyday you need sleep.

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BigBud
BigBudLv4

Pretty decent OP MC with system story so far. MC seems to lack all critical thinking skills and is unable to do basic tasks without advice from her system. MC is also quite a fangirl for the other characters, but that is understandable, you would be lying if you said you wouldn’t be in awe upon seeing the real life Harry Potter. Other than the MC’s lack of backbone it’s pretty well written and not too nonsensical so far

12mth
DarkAce_Ghosts
DarkAce_GhostsLv12

Reveal spoiler

11mth
Fu_Hua_
Fu_Hua_Lv4

I haven't yet finished reading every chapters but I have to say though the Fangirling Mc is just ruining this for me and it's getting harder for me to continue reading cause my enthusiasm is slowly crumbling.BUT even though I don't like the MC's personality in the earlier chapters I'll continue to read hoping her Fangirling will tone down eventually.Anyways, here's my 5 stars

11mth
Jackleell
JackleellLv1

I have mixed feelings about the character and the narrative structure. The protagonist often comes across as overly reliant on the system granted to her, which diminishes her independence and personal growth. Her lack of initiative in boosting her intelligence and delving deeper into sciences or other areas of knowledge is a bit disappointing. This over-reliance on the system doesn't allow her character to fully explore her potential or develop self-reliance, which could have added more depth to her journey. Moreover, there's a notable lack of clarity regarding the entity that bestowed her powers. Understanding the entity's motives and the broader implications of these powers would add a much-needed layer of intrigue and complexity to the story. The origins and goals of this entity remain a mystery, which can be intriguing but also a bit frustrating from a narrative perspective. I would suggest an interesting plot development where the system develops its own separate entity, potentially even being removed from the protagonist's body. This could open up avenues for exploring themes like the consequences of power and the moral dilemmas of using such abilities. It could also lead to a deeper understanding of the 'Reality Bender' concept, perhaps hinting at the entity's enjoyment in manipulating or even destroying realities. Such a development could be an excellent opportunity for foreshadowing and adding a rich layer of suspense and complexity to the story. anyways i still enjoy this story.

11mth
Binge_Reader69
Binge_Reader69Lv1

awesome story so far(chapter 17), i have very high hopes for this, keep up the good work author

1yr
Leon_Joseph
Leon_JosephLv1

Reveal spoiler

9mth
Patrick_hell123
Patrick_hell123Lv15

you are getting better and better at writing

8mth
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