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Raging_Silver
Raging_SilverLv151yr
2024-03-12 20:15

I like this book so far, and honestly, it would make a great anime. Just correct your grammar mistakes and pacing. Overall, it's a great fantasy world book. Keep going. You're doing just fine.

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Arlemit
ArlemitAuthor

Thanks, my grammar still really sucks, doesn't it? (⁠;⁠ŏ⁠﹏⁠ŏ⁠)

Raging_Silver
Raging_SilverLv15

Your book is good, though you need to fix a few things, but it is still very enjoyable.

Arlemit:Thanks, my grammar still really sucks, doesn't it? (⁠;⁠ŏ⁠﹏⁠ŏ⁠)
That_Annoying_guy
That_Annoying_guyLv4

Is this single fl author?

Arlemit:Thanks, my grammar still really sucks, doesn't it? (⁠;⁠ŏ⁠﹏⁠ŏ⁠)
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Eternalsylph
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Well, another novel with potential, but what will we get? The generic +1500 caps?? Harem?? A successful MC, strong, handsome and for whom every girl who sees him needs to go change her underwear?? What could make this novel different? Will the author dare not to put a harem? Or even romance?? From the synopsis it seems like a "cold and emotionless" MC, but from experience and in the face of all expectations, they are the ones who end up having a harem with more women 🤣🤣🤣, I laugh so as not to cry. Author, you still have time not to screw up, unless you are one of those who puts your mental fantasies, which is not bad, but if it is that type, it is better to visit certain platforms before writing, you will 100% see how some ideas change. of romance and you will see the dissonance that is formed, not only in this one but in all of them, I don't know if you have noticed but the readers of this application are mostly people with 0 EQ who I bet a large part has not had a girlfriend, and If we talk about virginity I won't even comment on it, then when it comes to wanting harem or excessive romance things, you just need to think a little, whoever already has it in reality doesn't need to read about it because they already experience it, I personally don't experience it. normally be strong enough to go to space or split stars, then I see novels where there are people like that to excite me, then where does romance or even worse, the harem come in? 🤣🤣 This is something I've been thinking about for a while and it made me realize the type of people who read harem novels, or at least like them, I'm going to give an analogy "those who like NTR think they're the guy with who the girl cheats on the boyfriend" that is the type of mentality of a good part, not only of your readers, of the people of this platform, both authors and readers. Well, I see potential that's why I put effort into that comment and I hope that this novel goes well for you no matter what decision you make, good luck.

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