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Jmitch1
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2024-02-05 02:34

It has potential, but it’s bland. The background and the concept has a large potential. I forsee significant world building, but the character development makes it boring. So far, everything seems to be fed to the MC. He’s winning impossible battles from the get-go, and the motivation for wanting to get stronger and his knowledge base is unexplained. There are a few trope-y elements. It seems the novel could’ve used some more time baking in its conception. Though, I want to note it’s not as bad as I make it sound, but I’m not off the mark. I got bored at ch 19.

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Suk_min_Tak
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that's right it's fk boring, that's what I am talking about, and you are not sounding bad at all 😁😁😁😁

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Well, another novel with potential, but what will we get? The generic +1500 caps?? Harem?? A successful MC, strong, handsome and for whom every girl who sees him needs to go change her underwear?? What could make this novel different? Will the author dare not to put a harem? Or even romance?? From the synopsis it seems like a "cold and emotionless" MC, but from experience and in the face of all expectations, they are the ones who end up having a harem with more women 🤣🤣🤣, I laugh so as not to cry. Author, you still have time not to screw up, unless you are one of those who puts your mental fantasies, which is not bad, but if it is that type, it is better to visit certain platforms before writing, you will 100% see how some ideas change. of romance and you will see the dissonance that is formed, not only in this one but in all of them, I don't know if you have noticed but the readers of this application are mostly people with 0 EQ who I bet a large part has not had a girlfriend, and If we talk about virginity I won't even comment on it, then when it comes to wanting harem or excessive romance things, you just need to think a little, whoever already has it in reality doesn't need to read about it because they already experience it, I personally don't experience it. normally be strong enough to go to space or split stars, then I see novels where there are people like that to excite me, then where does romance or even worse, the harem come in? 🤣🤣 This is something I've been thinking about for a while and it made me realize the type of people who read harem novels, or at least like them, I'm going to give an analogy "those who like NTR think they're the guy with who the girl cheats on the boyfriend" that is the type of mentality of a good part, not only of your readers, of the people of this platform, both authors and readers. Well, I see potential that's why I put effort into that comment and I hope that this novel goes well for you no matter what decision you make, good luck.

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