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NeaCambelt
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2023-11-07 17:10

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Equuleus_Nox
Equuleus_NoxAuthor

Sure! Can you be a little specific as to how the dialogue is bizarre? I would certainly like some feedback if it made you feel this strongly!

NeaCambelt
NeaCambeltLv1

Eb bien certain mots dans certain dialogue sont bizarre , un moment goku parle comme quelqu'un née à notre époque ce qui est étrange vue que c'est de goku que l'on parle C'est pas top pour l'immersion ^^

Equuleus_Nox:Sure! Can you be a little specific as to how the dialogue is bizarre? I would certainly like some feedback if it made you feel this strongly!
UnsimpleMexicano
UnsimpleMexicanoLv1

Ese es el traductor que no funciona bien, yo no e notado ningún diálogo extraño.

NeaCambelt:Eb bien certain mots dans certain dialogue sont bizarre , un moment goku parle comme quelqu'un née à notre époque ce qui est étrange vue que c'est de goku que l'on parle C'est pas top pour l'immersion ^^
NeaCambelt
NeaCambeltLv1

si chapitre 13 dans le paragraphe ou goku presente gohan , en faite ton goku s"exprimer differement du goku normal alors je voudrais savoir si tu le sais ? et si oui est ce fait expres ?

UnsimpleMexicano:Ese es el traductor que no funciona bien, yo no e notado ningún diálogo extraño.
UnsimpleMexicano
UnsimpleMexicanoLv1

Lo hace a propósito es bastante bueno el cambio, en lo personal me gustó.

NeaCambelt:si chapitre 13 dans le paragraphe ou goku presente gohan , en faite ton goku s"exprimer differement du goku normal alors je voudrais savoir si tu le sais ? et si oui est ce fait expres ?
UnsimpleMexicano
UnsimpleMexicanoLv1

Supongo que le intenta dar seriedad y profundidad pero también lo deja siendo el mismo idiota que es Goku un 50/50 como el Goku de Dragón boll Z

NeaCambelt:si chapitre 13 dans le paragraphe ou goku presente gohan , en faite ton goku s"exprimer differement du goku normal alors je voudrais savoir si tu le sais ? et si oui est ce fait expres ?
Equuleus_Nox
Equuleus_NoxAuthor

Thanks for your response!

UnsimpleMexicano:Supongo que le intenta dar seriedad y profundidad pero también lo deja siendo el mismo idiota que es Goku un 50/50 como el Goku de Dragón boll Z
Equuleus_Nox
Equuleus_NoxAuthor

@NeaCambelt, can you specify which lines are making you feel characterization of Goku is off? Is it when he was introducing everyone to Gohan? Or when he was replying to Bulma's quip after he introduced Gohan at the beginning of the chapter?

NeaCambelt:si chapitre 13 dans le paragraphe ou goku presente gohan , en faite ton goku s"exprimer differement du goku normal alors je voudrais savoir si tu le sais ? et si oui est ce fait expres ?
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