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2024-06-28 13:56

😩 I am at chapter 10 story based it's good but so many unwise and unnecessary info dump from characters. Why would someone who the MC just met share so much info to the MC they even almost accidentally revealed their identity. For someone who is a beyonder and belongs to a secret organization like Twilight Hermit Order that's so unprofessional a doubt even a half mad and insane character who does such a thing unless influenced by supernatural powers.

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Shadow_Magus
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Firstly, thank you for the review Secondly, I made it for a reason and that reason can only be explained to the mc once he is strong enough, so for now it will remain unknown. Thirdly, I doubt there were too many info dumps. In fact, a lot of the information I have assumed readers know from before and have not even bothered to explain. Fourthly, yes, it is true there may have been some stupid decisions but I am not the one making those decisions, it is the characters, and they will have to live with the consequences of those actions. I don't think everyone can be perfect all the time. Of course, I try to make our MC's actions as logical as I can make them. Lastly, I will be trying my best to improve my writing over the course of the fanfic, an thank you once again for the review. If you have any other points, please leave comments or reply here, I will try my best to reply back asap.

Mr_Ice_Cream
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Thank you for your response I will give it another try.

Shadow_Magus:Firstly, thank you for the review Secondly, I made it for a reason and that reason can only be explained to the mc once he is strong enough, so for now it will remain unknown. Thirdly, I doubt there were too many info dumps. In fact, a lot of the information I have assumed readers know from before and have not even bothered to explain. Fourthly, yes, it is true there may have been some stupid decisions but I am not the one making those decisions, it is the characters, and they will have to live with the consequences of those actions. I don't think everyone can be perfect all the time. Of course, I try to make our MC's actions as logical as I can make them. Lastly, I will be trying my best to improve my writing over the course of the fanfic, an thank you once again for the review. If you have any other points, please leave comments or reply here, I will try my best to reply back asap.
Shadow_Magus
Shadow_MagusAuthor

Well, this turned out to be rather wholesome interaction….

Mr_Ice_Cream:Thank you for your response I will give it another try.
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Shadow_Magus:Well, this turned out to be rather wholesome interaction….
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