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marcelll3214
marcelll3214Lv211mth
2023-12-04 23:23

This story in a word. SIMPLE. Bruh i was so bored readig this that i simply started thinking about work multiple times. Just isnt worth it. xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx

Naruto: Starting in Naruto with Kekkei Genkai

MaD
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53 Chs

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MaD
MaDAuthor

😔

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marcelll3214
marcelll3214Lv2

Sry bro. It is just... everything is going too smoothly and too fast. Every thing that happens is just the best outcome without anybody doing anything. Also most of what you wrote is simply something that is in every generic fic. There is no conflict, no stakes, no real goal. Basis of your story is not bad otherwise i would not start reading it. It just feels empty. You need to add more... feelings i would say. I want to feel angry or happy or excited etc... Not sure how to expres it differently.

MaD:😔
11mth
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MaD
MaDAuthor

This will happen in the upcoming arc that is about to begin now. The protagonist will set out to explore the ninja world alone, encountering new enemies and adventures.

marcelll3214:Sry bro. It is just... everything is going too smoothly and too fast. Every thing that happens is just the best outcome without anybody doing anything. Also most of what you wrote is simply something that is in every generic fic. There is no conflict, no stakes, no real goal. Basis of your story is not bad otherwise i would not start reading it. It just feels empty. You need to add more... feelings i would say. I want to feel angry or happy or excited etc... Not sure how to expres it differently.
11mth
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MaD
MaDAuthor

But thank you for the comment and opinion.

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Mr_Night
Mr_NightLv5

Reveal spoiler

1yr

weeb_versus
weeb_versusLv11

Overall its really good but there somethings Im confused about. Theres a huge plothole around chakra. Its said he had a really small amount of chakra but he can apparently use shadow clones. Same with some jutsus, he uses them easily without running out and the issue is rarely addressed. I also hope that his relationships with his parents and naruto could be explained because for example, he invited naruto to his house and suddenly they are best friends, go to ichiraku all the time and his parents teach naruto everything they know easily, seems kinda unbelievable.

1yr
behind_your_sister
behind_your_sisterLv4

author-san you need to understand that not anyone can get close to jinchuriki and train him & be friends with him....also you are following naruto like dog... this story is same as cannon but added MC that's it a shame it was good at first.................

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Ertirios
ErtiriosLv4

Who’s going to be the female lead? Hope it doesn’t take long to meet her [img=More pls]

11mth
GodOfLight
GodOfLightLv1

Dude, I thought he would have a cool and unique kekkei genkai, but it turns out it’s just some kind of trash kekkei genkai, I thought it would be something unique, maybe I expected too much

8mth
jackson_smith
jackson_smithLv14

MaD Can you please do this Naruto Fanfiction next right after you finish Naruto : Starting in Naruto with a Kekkei Genkai. Naruto harem fanfiction A Naruto fan is reborn as a half-saiyan in Naruto on the night of the kyuubi attack as a baby orphan boy. As the story progresses he will become stronger and find women he will love and protect. Harem Sakura Ino Choji’s Mother Kurenai Yuhi Ayame Mebuki Haruno Madam Shijimi Anko mitarashi Tsume inuzuka Tsunade Senju Shizune Hana Inuzuka Tenten Temari Mabui Mei Terumi Kurotsuchi

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HeavenlyIko
HeavenlyIkoLv15

I like the story at the beginning but when I keep on reading it, I got bored it just like the other Fec, go to school, do missions but I'll wait for more chaps till then good luck 👍

8mth
Murod
MurodLv3

this history has potential , continue [img=рекомендую][img=рекомендую][img=рекомендую][img=рекомендую][img=рекомендую][img=рекомендую][img=рекомендую]

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Nobody770
Nobody770Lv13

It is a good Story please Write further !!!

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