so many problems. mid at best but i bet this will get deleted
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you should have given suggestions on how to improve the book. But instead... you call it bad and leave... can you write a novel?
ahh sorry i was just texting you.the problems are mostly show dont tell which is literally so easy to fix. like read any book that shows u how to properly show and evoke description and the dialogue too it's too long and feels off ya gotta shorten it and make it more realistic. thats it. cold have been a really cool novel from it's concept
Whoa hold on buddy, I don't need to be cook to criticize food. You are coming on way too aggressively. And he's correct, if you know how to use internet, you can find history of this author deleting low rating comments and spewing hate comments on readers. Unless of course you are one of his alt's or his editor's ....
Dexter_Sled_1111:you should have given suggestions on how to improve the book. But instead... you call it bad and leave... can you write a novel?
I'm an author. And sorry my words came out aggressive, I just like the work
Lord_Eggie:Whoa hold on buddy, I don't need to be cook to criticize food. You are coming on way too aggressively. And he's correct, if you know how to use internet, you can find history of this author deleting low rating comments and spewing hate comments on readers. Unless of course you are one of his alt's or his editor's ....
please read my new novel "The end of world has not yet begun, the system is activated in advance"
the dialogue is to long? to me it just sounds like ur lazy if u can't accept the fact that people talk a lot in the real world then u need to go and talk to more people outside instead of through a mic
Hezekiah_Lindsey:ahh sorry i was just texting you.the problems are mostly show dont tell which is literally so easy to fix. like read any book that shows u how to properly show and evoke description and the dialogue too it's too long and feels off ya gotta shorten it and make it more realistic. thats it. cold have been a really cool novel from it's concept
sorry for the ramble but ya it's not that bad
Lord_Eggie:Whoa hold on buddy, I don't need to be cook to criticize food. You are coming on way too aggressively. And he's correct, if you know how to use internet, you can find history of this author deleting low rating comments and spewing hate comments on readers. Unless of course you are one of his alt's or his editor's ....
dude, there are different types of readers. some like long dialogues, others don't. in the real world yes, people talk long strings of trash dialogue like gossip. in the real world though, people study math. that may be a good suggestion to the work: add tons of math to make it realistic. otherwise, Goku still solos.
Jack_111:the dialogue is to long? to me it just sounds like ur lazy if u can't accept the fact that people talk a lot in the real world then u need to go and talk to more people outside instead of through a mic
Oh, nice.
Hezekiah_Lindsey:ahh sorry i was just texting you.the problems are mostly show dont tell which is literally so easy to fix. like read any book that shows u how to properly show and evoke description and the dialogue too it's too long and feels off ya gotta shorten it and make it more realistic. thats it. cold have been a really cool novel from it's concept
