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2024-01-20 05:52

The writing quality is great, nothing a newbie like me can provide an opinion for. I know you said you'll do weekly updates and I'm really exited to see what happens next. The story is developing nicely, I like how you handled the father situation. It added an extra layer to the characters that I really enjoyed. I hope you can do more with Eli, his relationship with John hasn't been explored much now that they are teenagers. I don't remember if you had an pictures for the characters, but the cover art is really cool and I'm assuming that's the main character. The world background is done really well, I personally do not like to research much when writing a story as I feel like that ruins the fun for me a little bit. But I can appreciate it when you can tell that an author knows what they are talking about. Especially with the complicated history of America's independence.

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Thanks for noticing the research. I'm a massive history nerd so having someone show appreciation for that is really nice.

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