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Benoit_Valtin
Benoit_ValtinLv111yr
2023-08-15 12:41

I don't understand the good grades, it lacks realism, people lack consistency, (I'm talking about the famous duo of the shield) the explanations requested by the shields are not really explained, in fact not explained at all. and the age of the hero is not mentioned after chapter 1 oh no again it's never mentioned... a lot of info is missing, everything is skimmed over. I think it's written with the help of an AI or else the person doesn't really like the story and the bacle.

The Son of Marvel

UnlimitedRage
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42 Chs

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UnlimitedRage
UnlimitedRageAuthor

You are absolutely right, this story needs a more human touch and I am going to start going into more depth. I was relying to much on the AIs help. Thank you for the review, I’ll take any advice I can get to become a better writer. Have a good day

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The MC is 15 years old if there is any confusion.

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UnlimitedRage
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To ever that is reading this little story thank you. I am writing this to get a better understanding on how to approach writing any kind of story. The first 27 chapters I know I messed up a lot, I am trying something different for the later chapters. I am going to start having the Mc get away from the plot of the hero’s of earth. It’ s going to be him and the wide open universe and a date with Thanos.

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