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Rhen_Kira18
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2024-07-12 21:10

Writing quality: ⭐⭐ Story Development: ⭐⭐⭐⭐ Character Design: ⭐⭐⭐⭐ Updating stability: ⭐⭐⭐⭐⭐ World Background: ⭐⭐⭐⭐ .... This is my rating for this novel and I read up to chapter 104 while giving my review. To be fair, I like the plot and I enjoyed reading it despite not being a fan of reverse harem (or harems in general). The only major problem I have with the novel is the writing quality, hence, the 2 star rating. The pacing is okay and I haven't found any inconsistency with how the dialogue was written, so it's good. The problem was on the use of words and the grammar (though I'm one to talk). There are many grammatical errors I found here and the misuse of the nouns in a sentence like instead of using her/him, it was written as she/he. And also the appropriate use of the -ed,-ing, or -es/s at the end of the word, especially the past and present pronouns. Not just this, I also found errors on the use of punctuation marks, which changes the entire meaning of the sentence. For example, when the author wrote (note: not accurate), "Master, I will teach you something." where the person saying this was the Master himself to his disciple, but this sentence, with the comma (,) symbol being misplaced, changed the whole meaning to where the person saying this was addressing someone as Master and wanting to teach them something. The correct sentence should be, "Master will teach you something." or just the "I will teach you something." The example I gave happened many times in the chapters I've read, not just the Master part but when the people addressed themselves in the 3rd pov but with the added comma after that, which changed the whole meaning of the sentence. Not being mean or anything, but I really suggest to author-sama that you find an editor to help your wonderful works, but if you cannot find them, there's some tools that can help you check for errors like Grammarly or chatgpt or something to improve your work.

Ethereal World: Vicious Cannon Fodder's Immortality Road

Littlecarrot
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Rhen_Kira18
Rhen_Kira18Lv11

I apologize if my review came out mean but I'm just particular with the grammar or the writing quality in general when reading novels. Since despite having a good plot and promising story, it'll be hard to read if the quality of writing is poor. So I really hope there will be improvements in the story. I may or may not stop reading this but it depends since I'm interested in how the story progressed sooo yeah.

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