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Review Detail of poposwitch in Daily Drama (In American TV Shows)

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poposwitch
poposwitchLv28dpoposwitch

There is too much redundant useless stuff. Reading it feels like it watching a soap opera,, with 2 manu dialog that lead to owhere. 99% of these interactions can be cut down & 70% of the scenes can be cut down, if they are not adding to the plot or a setup for future reveal or funny or cool you don’t need to write them. I am reading onle line from every 5-10 paragraph & am keeping up. That is such a waste... This is good story, start cutting down scenes and dialog to make it a great one

Daily Drama (In American TV Shows)

Maximus_Quill

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systemdevourer
systemdevourerLv13systemdevourer

I get your pov the story is slow but as the author said it's a slice of life, I think the author is not looking for any action or adventure beyond your avg. teenage might go through. considering the introduction of luke Cage and other such characters it is easy to build up expectation for hard action development but as I understand the author is not aiming for that. Though sometime I too skip the medicine technical stuff, I find that ok which watching TV series but not so much while reading, hey but that's just me.

Maximus_Quill
Maximus_QuillAuthorMaximus_Quill

So, your review was left in chapter 7 so I think that's where you decided to write it... The novel is a slice of life, it is not action, it is not adventure and above all it is not a narrative epic, there are "cool" and "fun" moments, obviously there will be more interesting things and interactions later (chapter 7 of 57) because the kind of world I'm writing in but don't expect anything more than development between characters with "redundant" interactions because that's life. Now your review is also based on your inability to read a chapter completely, skip 5 to 10 paragraphs? I don't even understand what you're reviewing because you're basically reading the incomplete story. Thanks for the, "criticism?" but since it's done in chapter 7 and it doesn't really make much sense to me I'll continue doing what I do. Slice of life: Literary expression refers to a narrative technique that presents a seemingly arbitrary sample of a character's life, often lacking a coherent plot, conflict, or ending (in this case there will be conflict from time to time). and there will also be an end).

Nathan_Cole_3387
Nathan_Cole_3387Lv3Nathan_Cole_3387

Bro this is not valid at all. It's a slice of life you can't expect constant action like your reading JJK. To me every chapter has been enjoyable and actually way better than I thought this novel was going to be

poposwitch
poposwitchLv2poposwitch

No need to feel attacked, & get defensive. I understand my phasing could have been hars ( depending on the reader) & I apologize for not taking your feelings into consideration. I wrote that after chapter 23. I loved the interactions at the beginning but after 9.. it got tedious to get through... Yes, I read ( more like listened) to every word. I use a text to speech software. If I'm listening to a good story, were something interesting or important is a constantly happening I purposely slow down my listening speed & enjoy it slowly cause there are no wasted words. I do that for you story when he is not talking to his family & neighbors... Basically, new characters & hospital scenes. But the way you write dialog feels like a chore to get through, so blitze though them at 4.7x speed ( & I was still able to follow what's going on with just just a few interactions being clear). Basically focus on efficiency of words in dialogues... or don't it's your story.

Maximus_Quill:So, your review was left in chapter 7 so I think that's where you decided to write it... The novel is a slice of life, it is not action, it is not adventure and above all it is not a narrative epic, there are "cool" and "fun" moments, obviously there will be more interesting things and interactions later (chapter 7 of 57) because the kind of world I'm writing in but don't expect anything more than development between characters with "redundant" interactions because that's life. Now your review is also based on your inability to read a chapter completely, skip 5 to 10 paragraphs? I don't even understand what you're reviewing because you're basically reading the incomplete story. Thanks for the, "criticism?" but since it's done in chapter 7 and it doesn't really make much sense to me I'll continue doing what I do. Slice of life: Literary expression refers to a narrative technique that presents a seemingly arbitrary sample of a character's life, often lacking a coherent plot, conflict, or ending (in this case there will be conflict from time to time). and there will also be an end).
poposwitch
poposwitchLv2poposwitch

I meant there was no tension in the interactions, no conflict or stakes. The only stake Is if he ignored them they will be sad. Which would not affect the "plot or at least that would introduce som level of tension and weight in this interactions. Story = entertaining, this fells like I'm sitting through someone's daily life, & I can't skip the boring parts

systemdevourer:I get your pov the story is slow but as the author said it's a slice of life, I think the author is not looking for any action or adventure beyond your avg. teenage might go through. considering the introduction of luke Cage and other such characters it is easy to build up expectation for hard action development but as I understand the author is not aiming for that. Though sometime I too skip the medicine technical stuff, I find that ok which watching TV series but not so much while reading, hey but that's just me.
ThePandaCritic
ThePandaCriticLv1ThePandaCritic

while i understand ur views a 2 star is low ball for a story u seem to like . A 3 or even 4 star would've get ur point over with. The problems u point out doesn't warrant a 2 start.

systemdevourer
systemdevourerLv13systemdevourer

well it is as you say, I guess we are used to tense scenarios in slice of life since give character are usual screw up there relationship or professional life for one or other in tv series. But pj doesn't seem to have bad outstanding rep. with any one currently. and he doesn't seem like a guy who strains in rel. with anyone to yeah, we don't get the kind to tension you are talking about, but I kinda like that every one is understanding and there is no heavy backlash.

poposwitch:I meant there was no tension in the interactions, no conflict or stakes. The only stake Is if he ignored them they will be sad. Which would not affect the "plot or at least that would introduce som level of tension and weight in this interactions. Story = entertaining, this fells like I'm sitting through someone's daily life, & I can't skip the boring parts
poposwitch
poposwitchLv2poposwitch

Oh that4 only happens in I give 4 for all or it. We doesn’t show me specific star rating I gave 5, 3 1 1

ThePandaCritic:while i understand ur views a 2 star is low ball for a story u seem to like . A 3 or even 4 star would've get ur point over with. The problems u point out doesn't warrant a 2 start.
Bouncy_Beast
Bouncy_BeastLv4Bouncy_Beast

to me this story is like watching a good tv series.