Shadow_XL

I just finished reading 200 chapters of this and I’m dropping it. The author isn’t good at writing romance and is even worse with harem. The pacing is also all over the place. Sometimes it feels like I skipped a chapter but no the author just can’t keep up with his own novel apparently.

It’s an enjoyable read but there are a few issues I have with it. First, they introduced Lila as one of the love interest but we barely end up seeing her. Like legit 40+ chapters with absolutely no mention of her and the author even introduces another female character during that time and it seems the author likes her more because she gets way more screen time. I know this is supposed to be a harem but you can’t just forget one of the main female characters for that long, that’s bad writing and pacing. Then there’s the stuff with his family. Bro that was done so terribly, the author made it seem like the family really betrayed him. His own sister made his gf at the time break up with him and called him disgusting. So why when he goes to confront his family, he forgives them and basically acts like nothing happened. All that happened was that the sister cried once and the next day everything was ok. That’s not how real emotions work. It takes time to forgive someone and it’s never that easy. I’m not saying that MC should’ve been immature with his reaction, but he should at least act like what they did hurt him which it did, so why was he acting so unaffected and unbothered when he actually saw them? IMO this was bad writing on the authors part. With all that being said it is interesting and not a complete lost cause. The author just needs to step it up a notch.

This is one of the most well written stories that I've seen on this site. I've only read 8 chapters and I'm already in love. All the characters feel real and are written so well. The best part of this novel is definitely the characters because there's literally not a single bad or even mid character here. Some scenes are so good I almost cried. Author please keep this story going because this is just peak.

Is the MC just a lazy POS or will there be character development?

OK, I like the drip.

Bro just leave then.

The characters are extremely bland. The author had a good idea and concept but unfortunately lacked the writing skills to pull it off. The way the novel is structured is weird too like the bold words that separate the arcs, those should have just been chapter titles and the author should've expounded upon each arc and make them longer and more meaningful. It's not awful but it is horribly paced. I wonder is the author even tried to look a other fan-fics to get an idea of how to properly structure a novel.

It's a immature self-insert type story. That doesn't necessarily mean it's garbage but don't expect amazingly written characters and plots. It is good for just something casual to read through tho. I hope the author continues to get better if they're interested in doing this long term.

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