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SnowApathie
SnowApathieLv41yr
2023-07-10 00:44

Ok so this story is confusing, like really! The author uses lots of flowery words which I love but made me like google up a word every two/three paragraphs (even thought my vocabulary is above webnovel standarts), they can make the setting more magicall but for that it needs to be interesting. Which it isn't, I have read up to three chaps, which I know ain't a lot, but is still enough for somewhat of a proper review. The story is goung on and on without being interesting, 3/4 of the two first chapters are just descriptions wich again can be good but with something inetersting on the side. I don't even know if the author himself can follow what's happening, also I felt like he forgot at some point while in teh forst that the mc was hurt, it was completly ignored as if she were fine. I didn't see much spelling mistakes to be honest, I saw one or two errors but that's it. There are also long sentences, which I also like, but it becomes easy to forget how it began.

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Entrail_JI
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Writing Quality - 2 stars. There's so much to improve here. Firstly, there are a couple of typos such as 'cloths' which I presume should be 'clothes' in the first chapter. Another one was 'figured' which should be 'figure'. There are several others in the novel. I suggest using Grammarly to fix these typos. It's an incredibly helpful tool that will bring the quality up by a notch. There's also several awkward sentences that make it hard to read. [Large rock that had protruded out of the swamp...] [More idea as to where she could be, and where she should head then just a moment ago.] This sentence is really hard to understand. Also, it should be than instead of then. [Once again, Grammarly can fix this for you.] Stability of updates - 5 stars. Only been three days since the novel has been uploaded and so far, i have seen that there's two updates a day. So I can only give 5 stars. Story Development - 3 stars. The first chapter was Ava in the forest trying to look for the Witch. The second chapter was Ava with the witch. The third chapter was about her seeing a glimpse of her past. To be honest, all of this could've been condensed into one or two chapters. A lot of the scenes and words can be cut. Character Design - 3 Stars I stopped at chapter 3, but at that chapter Ava's character was starting to unravel so I can't give it any lower than three and in fact it probably isn't fair for me to only give it a three. World Background - 4 stars Yeah, pretty good. Actually the most promising part of the novel. Overall rating 3.4 The story so far isn't bad. However, the grammar and spelling need a lot of improvement. As I've suggested, download Grammarly to mitigate a couple of the pointed-out problems. Furthermore, if you think a sentence is awkward, there's no tool better than ChatGTP to help you in that regard. We have AIs. Use them to your advantage. If you think something doesn't sound right, ask it for suggestions.

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