Writing Quality - 2 stars. There's so much to improve here. Firstly, there are a couple of typos such as 'cloths' which I presume should be 'clothes' in the first chapter. Another one was 'figured' which should be 'figure'. There are several others in the novel. I suggest using Grammarly to fix these typos. It's an incredibly helpful tool that will bring the quality up by a notch. There's also several awkward sentences that make it hard to read. [Large rock that had protruded out of the swamp...] [More idea as to where she could be, and where she should head then just a moment ago.] This sentence is really hard to understand. Also, it should be than instead of then. [Once again, Grammarly can fix this for you.] Stability of updates - 5 stars. Only been three days since the novel has been uploaded and so far, i have seen that there's two updates a day. So I can only give 5 stars. Story Development - 3 stars. The first chapter was Ava in the forest trying to look for the Witch. The second chapter was Ava with the witch. The third chapter was about her seeing a glimpse of her past. To be honest, all of this could've been condensed into one or two chapters. A lot of the scenes and words can be cut. Character Design - 3 Stars I stopped at chapter 3, but at that chapter Ava's character was starting to unravel so I can't give it any lower than three and in fact it probably isn't fair for me to only give it a three. World Background - 4 stars Yeah, pretty good. Actually the most promising part of the novel. Overall rating 3.4 The story so far isn't bad. However, the grammar and spelling need a lot of improvement. As I've suggested, download Grammarly to mitigate a couple of the pointed-out problems. Furthermore, if you think a sentence is awkward, there's no tool better than ChatGTP to help you in that regard. We have AIs. Use them to your advantage. If you think something doesn't sound right, ask it for suggestions.

Seriously this is a great novel when I saw the synopsis I saw that this will be a great book but when I started reading it was better than what I thought

2.6 The novel is written in a style that makes readers confused and makes them reread paragraphs over and over again to see what has actually happened in it. This takes the readers out of the flow, and it makes it harder for them to retain the information from previous paragraphs. The description of Ava was good, but several grammatical mistakes and typos ruin the experience. "a just a moment" "Further east THEN east" "Her cloths were tattered" "Easily finding footing a low hanging branch" "this figureD moved forward" Then, there are also grammar issues. "Making her pace through the night" "A crack sounded out" If you don't care enough to put your novel through a spell-checker, why should we care?

The writing is all over the place. Most of it is just so confusing. Can’t tell weather this is past or present tense. Descriptions were odd and narrator sounded schizophrenic. Im gonna keep reading it because i see potential. This isn’t Terrible and the synopsis is good. My interest is there.

I like the descriptive writing and the atmosphere of the world is pretty vivid. However, In my opinion, I feel that the story telling is a little bit slow .

The synopsis is confusing. It promises first POV but we only see third POV. I dub this novel as very confusing. Too many spelling mistakes and most things are confusing. For example: (Regardless, this ”figured” moved forward…) Or: (hight not much higher than her own…) I keep getting lost and rereading to try and find where I am. Ava does not have a bright mind is what I can say if I want to be family friendly. The narrator sounds like someone with a mental illness and keeps adding to the confusion. The only thing one can say is good here is the world building. It looks and reads good. Sadly, it alone cannot salvage this mess of confusion. I may be called Chaos, but even I get confused.

I am legitimately confused by this novel, the first chapter is just too much. The synopsis is extremely alluring and worthwhile but the first chapter is just that much downer. There is almost close to no problem in grammar but the same can't be said for the formation of sentences and them making sense. I like the way world-building is done here and all because it is captivating, but, and big but here, it is harder to understand the more someone progresses taking away immersion. The chapters in need of a thorough redesigning.

Ok so this story is confusing, like really! The author uses lots of flowery words which I love but made me like google up a word every two/three paragraphs (even thought my vocabulary is above webnovel standarts), they can make the setting more magicall but for that it needs to be interesting. Which it isn't, I have read up to three chaps, which I know ain't a lot, but is still enough for somewhat of a proper review. The story is goung on and on without being interesting, 3/4 of the two first chapters are just descriptions wich again can be good but with something inetersting on the side. I don't even know if the author himself can follow what's happening, also I felt like he forgot at some point while in teh forst that the mc was hurt, it was completly ignored as if she were fine. I didn't see much spelling mistakes to be honest, I saw one or two errors but that's it. There are also long sentences, which I also like, but it becomes easy to forget how it began.

Love the book so much so far. It was very well orgnized. I've also read the other book of Pen and it was a very interesting one. Anyone who read this book should read that one too! You keep going Pen!!