Hello Author, the book is nice with a new refreshing perspective in ATG. While I don’t wanna accuse you of something you aren’t trying to do, I would like to caution you that you don’t move towards to too much contempt for the culture in this novel since some of the cultures in these novels are also based on the real culture of East Asian people. I understand the protagonist is from western culture but his comments should be more of critical nature than just nearly outright calling the culture dumb. And also, the way you portrayed Zia qingyue in the first chapters was totally different and inconsistent with how she should normally act. Because she is practicing a profound technique that that literally and metaphorically freezes the heart so those who practice it can’t portray or even feel emotions. But you portrayed her as blushing, laughing, showing emotions and that would make her inconsistent within the universe she is in. And the other is, while in the current world we are in some “medicines” people in the past used isn’t really a medicine but in the world the character is in those “rocks and herbs” really have an effect and do heal people. So, when the character makes some comments it make him look more ignorant and superior complex person than an intelligent person. Otherwise, I am enjoying your book. Keep it up.
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This review really turned off my interest in this novel. I personally hate transmigrators who are holier-than-thou in their attitude while being a bit ignorant. I mean sure the fanfic might be otherwise great, but the points you made would bother me to no end to otherwise enjoy it.
Thank you for the review though 😊
Oh, I am sorry. It wasn’t my intention to turn anyone off from maybe something they might enjoy.
I agree with the inconsistency in the character, but I think calling a culture dumb is perfectly acceptable. If people find it similar to smth IRL and get offended, maybe you should stop being a snowflake and see it from a rational perspective
I don’t quite think calling a culture dumb(if that is what the author seem to do at least) is offering a rational approach. Rational perspective a perspective gained from reasoning, not hurling insults.(Again, I don’t wanna accuse the author of doing so if that wasn’t his intention, but it at least seemed so with the attitude of the protagonist.) Thanks for your comment, though.
From the protagonist's point of view everything he says really makes sense, I read the first chapter and if I didn't know anything about Xianxia I would think the same as the protagonist.
