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daisora
daisoraLv1311mth
2023-12-20 01:45

you put effort into making this novel and it turned into a good novel but sadly there is several points that is making it unfruitful.for example you made an adventure into the dwarf kingdom made the mc into the its king with the 2 Elf princess as his wives and a rich mine but later you disposed of it all by two words "kingdom fall" without anything out of this Volume but Victor and a potential enemy that rarely appeared.this is just one of the many event that you made only to dispose of later, I have the felling that you are merely throwing out all kind of events without prober planning or that you forget about it.

Dungeon King: My Goblins Have Captured Countless Female Players

Red_Skin_Duck
4.5
689 Chs

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DarknessSmile
DarknessSmileLv15

I agreed 🙂‍↕️ I miss many characters from first halfway, like Succubus Dark Lord and White Phoenix😮‍💨

6mth
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Red_Skin_Duck
Red_Skin_DuckAuthor

Hello dear readers, author here. When I first started writing this book, my vision was to create an interesting parallel world. Here, the protagonist competes with people from different corners of Earth, leading to a series of intriguing stories. In the early stages, I felt pretty confident about my writing. However, due to some personal circumstances, I hit a rough patch during the creation of a few chapters. As a result, I noticed some readers weren't completely satisfied with certain parts of the narrative. Luckily, I've managed to bounce back. I've promptly improved the storyline, trimming away unnecessary details. My guiding principle has been to present you with the most engaging parts of the narrative. I promise the upcoming plot will become even more captivating. Thank you for reading the latest chapters, and for bearing with me, an immature author. If you are intrigued by what's to come, please continue to support me and subscribe to my book. Your support gives me more motivation to create exciting stories. Once my book is officially going premium, I will ensure the quality of each chapter, making sure your trust and subscription are well-rewarded. I believe you'll find your subscription worth every penny. The book will be published tomorrow. I greatly appreciate your support! Lastly, thank you to every reader who has supported me. Thank you!

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kadethornbush
kadethornbushLv14

Only read the first chapter up until he selected his bloodline. I’m dropped immediately after because dragons are so overused in 90 percent story that I just won’t read another one in the near future. Good luck to the author.

1yr
Cafemcdonald451
Cafemcdonald451Lv4

Good story idea but there are many plot holes and the author forgets things sometimes plus he keeps saying the full name of some of the characters which is kind of weird as well as the fact that the mc keeps calling the fmcs baby which is kinda weird imo. Overall I like the plot ideas but the author has some plotholes and memory problems, 4 stars.

1yr
DaoistLwCnMT
DaoistLwCnMTLv4

(this is review after 100 completing chapter.i have also made a review on this at 70 chapter.) There are like R*PE scene in every chapter every time the mc meet any women he R*PE her and the mc is became a rank in just 100 chapters and now what everything(weapon, enemy, skills) from now on here is gonna be s,ss,sss rank.the story is following the same just the mc is evolving what about others the author is only showing the mc side and not truly showing other side charcter.Now the story is gonna be same strong enemy will come mc defeat him and become more powerful and it will be repeting.

1yr
Pxzmen
PxzmenLv1

i fell kinda like it so far but with 8 billion people we should have more dark lord in the chat or you could say that it a local server or some thing but you doing great author it like a kingdom building game with the dark lord and a adventure game with the hero it 4/5 with me but 5 star for the first novel of you

1yr
Hello_Brother
Hello_BrotherLv4

Author san it is Harem or not please tell.I am a harem fan.🤭🤭

1yr
cynie_kenou
cynie_kenouLv11

so what happent with the other girls of mc??fell like they got forgotten. like the succubus(kinda forgot the name), that even when mc building the dark city the author did not even mention her not in a single chapter, so 3 for that. this review is for chapter 241.

11mth
cloud3
cloud3Lv4

I am very sorry to upload this,,,,,,,,,,

1yr
Blazzing18
Blazzing18Lv15

I JUST GOT DONE READING CHAPTER 103 AND I REALLY LOVE THIS BOOK BUT THERE R SOME THINGS THAT I THINK THAT SHOULD BE FIXED!!! I REALLY HOPE THE AUTHOR READS THE COMMENTS AND AT LEAST THINKS ABOUT WHAT IS SAID IN THEM IF NOT ACTUALLY MAKES THE CHANGES!!! I REALLY LOVE THIS BOOK AND ITS GOING GREAT SO FAR I JUST HOPW THAT IT GETS SOME OF THE THINGS IF NOT ALL OF THE THINGS GET FIXED AND THIS WAY THE BOOK BECOMES EVEN BETTER!! AND IF THE MC IS TO MOVE BECAUSE HE NEEDS MORE ROOM I HOPE HE WOULD BE ALLOWED TO TAKE ALL OF THE RHINGS HE PUT DOWN ALREADY FROM THE SYSTEM AND I HOPE HE STARTS TO GET MORE QUESTS FROM THE SYSTEM SO HE CAN GET MORE THINGS FROM IT AND I BELIEVE HE SHOULD START TO TAKE OUT MORE DRAK LORDS TO GAIN MORE RESOURCES SO HE CAN RISE HIS RANK AND BECOME STRONGER AND THIS WAY HE CAN FIND AWAY TO HELP ALL OF HIS WOMEN TO LEVEL UP AND BECOME STRONGER TOO!! I REALLY HOPE THE AUTHOR SEES THIS AND READS IT AND PUTS ALL OF THIS INTO ACTION OR AT LEAST USES THESE IDEAS TO PUT THINGS IN THE BOOK TO HELP THIS WAY ITS NOT EXACTLY WHAT IS WRITEN BUT AT LEAST THE IDEA WAS USED!!! WHAT HAPPENED TO THE BABY PHOENIX AND THE BABY DRAGON??? HE NAMED THE PHOENIX BUT NOT THE DRAGON!!! AND WHAT ABOUT THE BIG PHOENIX WHERE IS HE??? Y HAVENT U LET HIM AT LEAST GO OUT AND FLY HIGH SO NO ONE CAN SEE HIM SO HE CAN STRETCH HIS WINGS SO THEY DO GET TO THE POINT WHERE THEY DONT WORK ANYMORE!!!! AND WHAT ABOUT THE KIGHT GIRL WHAT HAPPENED TOCHER AND THE REST OF THE GIRLS!!!??? Y WOULD HE NOT COMBINED FORCES WITH THEM ALL AND BUILD 1 BIG BASE THAT BASICALLY BECOMES A KINGDOM FOR THE DARK LORDS AND HEAROS THAT R WITH HIM AND HAVE HIM HELP THE GIRLS POWER UP AND ALL THE TROOPS THAT EVERYONE HAS!! AND Y ID HE NOT PLAYING OR EVEN SPENDING TIME WITH ANY OF THEM!!!??? AND HE SHOULD BE SPENDING THE MOST TIME WITH THE KINGHT GIRL AND THE BABY PHOENIX AND THE NEWLY BORN BABY DRAGON!!!

1yr
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