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Cafemcdonald451
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2023-10-05 00:14

Good story idea but there are many plot holes and the author forgets things sometimes plus he keeps saying the full name of some of the characters which is kind of weird as well as the fact that the mc keeps calling the fmcs baby which is kinda weird imo. Overall I like the plot ideas but the author has some plotholes and memory problems, 4 stars.

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Blazzing18
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I JUST GOT DONE READING CHAPTER 103 AND I REALLY LOVE THIS BOOK BUT THERE R SOME THINGS THAT I THINK THAT SHOULD BE FIXED!!! I REALLY HOPE THE AUTHOR READS THE COMMENTS AND AT LEAST THINKS ABOUT WHAT IS SAID IN THEM IF NOT ACTUALLY MAKES THE CHANGES!!! I REALLY LOVE THIS BOOK AND ITS GOING GREAT SO FAR I JUST HOPW THAT IT GETS SOME OF THE THINGS IF NOT ALL OF THE THINGS GET FIXED AND THIS WAY THE BOOK BECOMES EVEN BETTER!! AND IF THE MC IS TO MOVE BECAUSE HE NEEDS MORE ROOM I HOPE HE WOULD BE ALLOWED TO TAKE ALL OF THE RHINGS HE PUT DOWN ALREADY FROM THE SYSTEM AND I HOPE HE STARTS TO GET MORE QUESTS FROM THE SYSTEM SO HE CAN GET MORE THINGS FROM IT AND I BELIEVE HE SHOULD START TO TAKE OUT MORE DRAK LORDS TO GAIN MORE RESOURCES SO HE CAN RISE HIS RANK AND BECOME STRONGER AND THIS WAY HE CAN FIND AWAY TO HELP ALL OF HIS WOMEN TO LEVEL UP AND BECOME STRONGER TOO!! I REALLY HOPE THE AUTHOR SEES THIS AND READS IT AND PUTS ALL OF THIS INTO ACTION OR AT LEAST USES THESE IDEAS TO PUT THINGS IN THE BOOK TO HELP THIS WAY ITS NOT EXACTLY WHAT IS WRITEN BUT AT LEAST THE IDEA WAS USED!!! WHAT HAPPENED TO THE BABY PHOENIX AND THE BABY DRAGON??? HE NAMED THE PHOENIX BUT NOT THE DRAGON!!! AND WHAT ABOUT THE BIG PHOENIX WHERE IS HE??? Y HAVENT U LET HIM AT LEAST GO OUT AND FLY HIGH SO NO ONE CAN SEE HIM SO HE CAN STRETCH HIS WINGS SO THEY DO GET TO THE POINT WHERE THEY DONT WORK ANYMORE!!!! AND WHAT ABOUT THE KIGHT GIRL WHAT HAPPENED TOCHER AND THE REST OF THE GIRLS!!!??? Y WOULD HE NOT COMBINED FORCES WITH THEM ALL AND BUILD 1 BIG BASE THAT BASICALLY BECOMES A KINGDOM FOR THE DARK LORDS AND HEAROS THAT R WITH HIM AND HAVE HIM HELP THE GIRLS POWER UP AND ALL THE TROOPS THAT EVERYONE HAS!! AND Y ID HE NOT PLAYING OR EVEN SPENDING TIME WITH ANY OF THEM!!!??? AND HE SHOULD BE SPENDING THE MOST TIME WITH THE KINGHT GIRL AND THE BABY PHOENIX AND THE NEWLY BORN BABY DRAGON!!!

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